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~K~
Member

since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

0 posted 2004-09-30 03:39 AM

I say it again for you
because you admire
the brutality of truth
& I admire
it's flawless edge
the way it
pierces the skin
with benign contempt
& opens the moment
to actual content

& I'm still surprised
I can still be surprised

By you

around &
under you
time flows
with erratic
precision
and Chaos
forms the noose
we use
to strangle
expectations

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-09-30 10:09 PM

I feel like today, your poems are talking to me. Which is strangely haunting. The title fits it, greatly. Great write. Compelling.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2004-10-01 01:01 PM

OMG I think you just described love . . .

*smile*

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

3 posted 2004-10-01 11:13 PM

Should not have missed this one this long. Well, done ~K~ ! The serrated blade formed by the poem itself is further evidence of love. We all need it, desire it, bleed from it, need it, desire it, bleed from it... Uh, epiphony here with the title! In awe...

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

4 posted 2004-10-02 09:40 PM

I admire the way you play with these words.

It's only a tragedy after we bleed.
Your pain doesn't count 'til it's stained the sheets.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

5 posted 2004-10-04 10:58 PM

expectations
should be left to die.....

let it all be,let it all exist...and revel in what is there

and you know this already

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

6 posted 2004-10-04 11:52 PM

I am awed by the write,
and the writer.

Excellent work.

Billy 8)

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

7 posted 2004-10-05 11:51 PM

WAY better than good!

and this

"I say it again for you
because you admire
the brutality of truth
& I admire
it's flawless edge
the way it
pierces the skin
with benign contempt
& opens the moment
to actual content"

Stellar!

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