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Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

0 posted 2004-09-30 01:47 AM


When shall my soul
in silent peace
Resign life's painful way?
My weary heart,
it's throbbing cease
And turn from fire to grey?

No fear no more,
no tear no more,
To stain my lifeless face
My love and memory
left to remain
In your gentle warm embrace.

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

© Copyright 2004 Carrigan Chantz - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2004-09-30 01:57 AM


Fire turn to grey.  I guess the death of almost an instinct is what it makes me think of.  Fire knows only to burn.  And when there is nothing left to fuel or burn off.  I guess the only way to stay a fire is to fuel it even after it seems broken and put out.  I really enjoyed this one.  

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
2 posted 2004-09-30 02:00 AM


I hoped you would, since it was written for something remarkably green...lol

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
3 posted 2004-09-30 02:34 AM


Note to self:
I want this on my tombstone.
Permission?

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

~K~
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since 2004-07-27
Posts 148

4 posted 2004-09-30 03:47 AM


No fear no more,
no tear no more,
To stain my lifeless face


This should be whispered through the ages. Quoted for it's perfect description of a feeling or lack thereof.

River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
5 posted 2004-09-30 06:12 PM


ok, this is good, I agree....but a green within a dream? explain? I'm lost...(and tired so maybe I should come back when I am thinking more clearly)

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
6 posted 2004-09-30 10:04 PM


I like that. Fire turn to grey. Nice work Purity!

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
7 posted 2004-10-01 12:20 PM


I had an itchy feeling about something like that.  lol.  And it was written with such a  purity.  lol.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
8 posted 2004-10-01 12:39 PM


i,too, didn't get the title at first, but now me thinks i doeth. what a dedication. but you must stop evoking tears. that is a compliment, not a serious request.

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

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