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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-09-28 11:21 PM


Blue-lined faces,
Pretend smiles, all the while,
Glitter, glue, stickers,
Making pretty what was blank and childish,
Stylish.

Link arms,
Parade the table top,
If you look closer,
We are pretty much similar.

Thin and crinkled,
Generated thoughts and voices,
Destroyed by the fire,
Lit by the government,
Made to believe we have choices,
Live these lives?
Or die by protest?

Light a match, up in flames,
Gone to waste,
Our paper doll images.


Paper thin frames,
Paper doll friends,
That’s all we are.
Driven by amusement,
Us paper dolls,
Got to stick together,
Even if only by linked arms and glued ridges.

Note: I didn't think this one was dark, but it's unfamiliar to post anywhere else.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

© Copyright 2004 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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Member Patricius
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286
United States
1 posted 2004-09-28 11:23 PM


Hollow,
I'll bet you'd be welcomed in another forum. I like this piece. Nice analogies and lots of food for thought. Well done. Thanks. And, by the way, fun tagline.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
2 posted 2004-09-28 11:26 PM


"Gone to waste...our paper doll images"... yes, hollow, this belongs in dark!~and I loved it. Simply incredible word selection on this one and an awesome job of conveying the title's image in the poem. Really made me think about that glue we use to bond!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
3 posted 2004-09-28 11:29 PM


AHHH!! absolutely LOVED it! it wasnt as dark as your others, but it didnt need to be dark..it was brlliant without darkness..
lol, i love this poem to death! i think its my favourite, just because its just such a cool poem..
with love and darkness,
Kirsty.
p.s i am so saving this one

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2004-09-29 02:56 AM


LOVED IT!

HEHE REMEMBER MY PAPER DOLLS? MY FREINDS?

*SIGH* ADORE IT

wow


so glad you got your rhythm back chica

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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