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River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2004-09-28 08:39 PM



Candle burning shards of my sane
and in lullabied rain I follow a thought
- a trail of timeless dream

Tall breath stealing white robed being
thrilling, tells me what's coming
just as it happened to the pixie duck
only I wasn't scrooging

Idley laying, waiting
staring into statue eyes
sudden stone presence
shadowy cold essence
paralize blind afraid

"Who are you?"
an answer chilling corrupting
"Born of Elijah"
the one who heard whispers
and flew with fire

Quit the eskimo job I never had
snowy bitter pictures land
philisophical rants in my hand

Decieving confusion holds my eyes shut
"I command you to flee and never return!"

Laughter
Anger
shaking defiance of pridefull scum...
"In the name of the king!"
quaking pounding shadowy torents of silence.

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

© Copyright 2004 Bonnie Sue Bixler - All Rights Reserved
green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
1 posted 2004-09-28 11:41 PM


This is good.  I saw it had a little number zero by it so I figured I should check it out and be the first to respond.  Es co lamenta esclurande elcampick laesskoro strangorie el limpicoro lamentora scallesk amorasca sham picahorrey.  If you try to read that roll the r's.  I like it.

-GIS

[This message has been edited by green_itchy_stuff (09-29-2004 12:03 AM).]

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
2 posted 2004-09-28 11:46 PM


...because in the end He still says "Puedo esperar por siempre si tu dices que estaras alli, tambien!"...
(I can wait forever if you say you'll be there, too)...
Another just fantastic poem, River, and a true example of the stewardship of utilizing the talents given to you!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
3 posted 2004-09-29 03:15 AM


I was originally intrigued by the title. And the poem just blew me away

Really really REALLY good write

You got so much talent!

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
4 posted 2004-09-29 01:12 PM


Very nice.

Yes, the title got me as well

River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
5 posted 2004-09-29 04:11 PM


Since I'm only a few weeks into my elementary spanish class It took me a few minutes to realise that Green is on some kind of spanish crack that I want, and Purity was saying something nice and I'm hoping the perenthasies indicates translation. =) rrrrrrrrrrrrr. SI. Gracias ustedes amigos.

      RRRiver.

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
6 posted 2004-10-01 08:05 PM


Don't know why I haven't replied yet. Lullabied rain, I like how that sounds, Nice work, as always. Title was indeed an eye-catcher.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
7 posted 2004-10-01 10:38 PM


You want crack.  lol.  I wasn't speaking in spanish, it was tongues.  Even I don't know what it means.  Chiclharra lamoskadro sey le olamess skinorra.  Try that one.  hehe.

GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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