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littlewing
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0 posted 2004-09-28 03:17 AM



The time, the time, the
tick tock time the
creaking crack of my back Oh,
my spine it aches, this midnight hour
our
where art thou faith?

Can you answer me, please?

When I see, plains
and planes of people, masked and choking,
Mother Earth, smoking her last
death
to this realm, you know.
I saw it once, I did
it fell like bricks and landed on my chest.

I couldnt breathe . . .

© Copyright 2004 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

1 posted 2004-09-28 05:02 AM


I saw it once, I did you know.

lw, excellent momentum here. You were able to grab down deep and pen it out, very nicely.

Excellent read.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-09-28 10:44 PM


Just enough time to post a quick thumbs up reply littlewing. Great write. Still beautiful.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

littlewing
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3 posted 2004-09-29 12:50 PM


Thanks you guys for always reading, you know I appreciate it, even if I am not here as much as I want to be.  
wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
4 posted 2004-09-29 01:16 PM


Ya just can't let ogres sit there on your chest like that...Pinch its butt!
Midnitesun
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Gaia
5 posted 2004-09-29 02:19 PM


ROTFLMAO at Ed's reply. Now I forgot what I was going to say.
littlewing
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6 posted 2004-09-29 11:19 PM


LMFAOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
eor
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blues & greys
7 posted 2004-10-08 06:03 PM




nuff said

Awake through motion with curiosity to curtain your first move
Over arms length they'll break protocol
Jealous envy for the youngest one

~K~
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since 2004-07-27
Posts 148

8 posted 2004-10-15 08:23 AM


Faith is wound up with a good book in your favorite chair. Fact or fiction holds no dominion in her grasp.
loved your poem.

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2004-10-15 08:26 AM


As I concede the point of a yeti as I laugh, I also know and recognize the pain of the "pressing".

NO MORE STONES

(and I'd have bet ya yesterday I'd never type that in this lifetime)

but yep,

that's how I saw this'n...

a plank and torture, one stone weight atta time...


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