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The Dead of Night |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
Lying awake, at the dead of night Eyes wide open Heart beating quickly What was that sound? What was that sound? Ears straining Were those footsteps? Was that a creaking door? Panic rising, like a hot bubble Head starts throbbing My blood drains, icy cold and tingly. What was that sound? Breathing gets shallow Sit up in my bed, Or is this noise Just in my head? Have I been imagining it? Creak, creak, shuffle.. WAIT..body tense...waiting.. What WAS that sound? "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
honestly, people on this forum suck...no one ever replies..i mean, please tell me that my poems suck and thats the reason no one replies, and when someone does that, then I'll stop posting my lame ass poems, but god, just not replying its so frustrating. the people on "open poetry" reply by the dozens! but some of my poems, just dont fit in there, so i dont want to post in there. but yeah..im sorry for having a rant, but its just so depressing sitting here, waiting for people to reply and no one does. PLEASE IM BEGGING EVERYONE TELL ME THAT MY POEMS SUCK. because id rather know, than be delusional and think "its not because my poems are crap that they're not replying" anywho...i better be off.. "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
eek! i didnt mean to freak out that bad. sorry lol "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Whoa Kirst, that was scary. I like how the element of mystery didn't stop in this poem, and how it was left unsolved. Not one of your best, but still greatly enjoyed. Don't think that just because your poems get no replies that they aren't good, they are. But soem people like different types, lots probably haven't read it yet. And to be completely honest, if you don't like posting here just because you don't get 6 replies for every one, maybe post in critical analysis or open. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
First of all vamp ~ your insecurity is part of your dark charm! Secondly, this one was undeniably pristine....for two reasons: One, I am 36 years old, and my bedroom is in the basement of the house that was once my grandparents. When they were alive, the basement was floored with red clay, and used as a storage house for sweet potatoes. Now I have carpet, electronics, and everything I own down here in a place I once would never go, and yet to this day and at this age, the creaks and cracks of this house scare the bejeagles outta me. I can't stay here alone. Secondly, you chose this time to KISS it...as in keep it simple with the language. Makes me all the more aware of how strange and dark my childhood fears are still to this day. Touche' ! Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself... |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Yes, after reading Purity's reply, I agree. Your insecurity is part of your dark charm. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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