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vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
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Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-09-25 01:37 AM



Look at me go, watch me dance
Watch me spill the words inside.
Once again I mumble
Once again I  stumble
Letting it all out
Telling someone what goes on inside
Just freaking them out
Making them wish they’d never known.

Do I think they can help?
Do I think they can wave
A magic wand,
Make all my pain
Disappear?

Always and forever a resounding NO
Screaming it into the depths of the world.
What did I hope to achieve?
They cannot help.
No one can help.
No one needs to know.

But yet I still mumble
Rambling on about everything
Breaking down and crying
Its too overwhelming
How could you think they could help?

Such a stupid fool,
Why do you make the mistake so often?
Why do you make the mistake so often?
Close yourself up,
Don’t let anyone in.
Then maybe,
You might not
Be hurt once again.

*this represents all the times, I let out my feelings to different people, at different times in my life, and how it was always, and forever will be a mistake*

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

© Copyright 2004 Kirsty - All Rights Reserved
Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-09-25 01:43 AM


God how we wish after we opened our mouths and hearts that we hadn't...
This was a phenominal poem, vamp... and you continally amaze me with your style of writing. Thank you for sharing this with us, and continue to build a storehouse of understanding things that twist our hearts!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
2 posted 2004-09-25 02:16 AM


wow..thanks so much for your reply purity. but it is so true, and i had just made that mistake once again, and i had all this stressed out bottled up energy, so i released it in the best way possible.

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

Purity
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since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2004-09-25 02:47 AM


"but it is so true...
and i had all this stressed out, bottled up energy...
so I released it in the best possible way"

A poem within itself.... You're getting really good!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
4 posted 2004-09-25 02:58 AM


why do you make this mistake so often
why do you make this mistake so often

can i ask that a thousand times and still not know the answer?

i feel you with this one.

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
5 posted 2004-09-25 04:05 AM


It is hard. Some will turn away, but there are others who turn back. I know how you feel actually. I find though, that they always turn it into something about themselves, how they had something just like how you are feeling. In fact that is just what I have done. Arrrrgggggggghhhhh, now I'm just confusing myself.

Nice write.

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
6 posted 2004-09-25 04:11 AM


thanks everyone for the replies. i think everyone sometimes makes this mistake. and it does suck, especially when things become awkward :S

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
7 posted 2004-09-26 10:15 PM


wow...i can definetley relate.
but dont forget, its not always a mistake...

To tell you the truth, i am battling inside right now, of wether or not to simply tell someone that i am sorry. Wether it would be a mistake or not, wether they will accept it, and to tell you the truth, it probably will be, but i need to do it. For myself.

ANYWAYS...amazing write, and i just want you to remeber, that sometimes, though it may seem like a mistake, it isnt in the long run of things...

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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