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green_itchy_stuff
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0 posted 2004-09-16 04:06 AM



Restart
Summon the magic of my heart
Brush away ashes of passionate fire
Painful honest
Who am I

A spirit with no boundaries
No sleep
Push through what hurts
A beautiful collaspe
Result of the horns

Death self machine
Mechanical, greasy, dirty in my head
Dimly lit rust of desire
Melodic sound of music scream
Hungry without my life of being

Work from my hands
Pagan idols; fools with demands
Heartless bastard on top of commands
A slip and fall shatters plans
Breath of witch, ignore God of the lands

Protection of fierce angellic fury
My friend dies to a home of Hell
Flames roast a stench from fantasy
Ignorant fool for what he chose
A man that had much and not enough

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
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1 posted 2004-09-16 12:53 PM


There are two parts that struck me here most:

the who am I part (My God will any of us ever know?  We will have an inkling . . .)
and the part about the man who had it all but not enough . . .

That struck me the most because you know?
I should be grateful for all that I have and sometimes I am not, sometimes I get down
on myself and life in general and I
should be happy I am here . . .

Thank you for this, you just made me appreciate life that much more, Craig.

River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
2 posted 2004-09-16 06:34 PM


Hey you arn't the first one littlewing   this guy is an answered prayer for me...litterally. anyways I won't get into the details, but um, anywho..
  Craig it's a Melodic sound of music scream...get it? you could make a song out of this that sounds like that, what do you think? (brilliant dude) weeeaaa...need I say more? anywho, laterrr.

    - Bon


"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
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3 posted 2004-09-16 10:39 PM


Yeah I wrote this last night while I was at my friend's house and I let him read it and he asked, "Is this about me?"  I answered, "I don't know is it?"

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17
Posts 150
The point of no return
4 posted 2004-09-17 03:31 PM


I have to confess that I didn't like it.  It sounds more like you've targeted a group because you, yourself, had misgivings.  But I could be reading this all wrong.

It's not the letting go that hurts, it's the holding on.

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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5 posted 2004-09-18 09:34 PM


Not necessarily.  Life seems hard as crap at times so I wrote a poem about rest, but like most of my work it only ends in ironic misery that comes from resting from the garbage of this life in Hell, kinda like a suicide.  As for my personal screw ups.  They may have a little to do with it, but its mainly because I keep running into people that I share my story with and they pretend its all a joke or a lie.  As for shame about writing this way,...  none.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

PainBaneChaos
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The point of no return
6 posted 2004-09-20 09:08 PM


Well, gee.  I didn't say it wasn't good.  :-p
green_itchy_stuff
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7 posted 2004-09-21 06:34 PM


Thank you. lol.  I guess I just dig out of myself like a man hole full of junk to sort it out into something somewhat enjoyable.  lol.
-Craig

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
8 posted 2004-09-23 02:54 AM


Very good, don't know why I didn't reply.

Hey that rhymed.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

green_itchy_stuff
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New Caney, Tx
9 posted 2004-09-23 12:29 PM


Thats cute Hollow.  Thanx.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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