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River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2004-09-15 05:53 PM

Pleasureable Haunted Eyes
troubled measurable lies
forced to cherish gain
spent on heartless pain

ugly caligraphy black ink
splattered into my child spring
killing the light fruit
splintering the deep roots

oh thorns cannot sing
despair clouds everything

where is my savior?
here is my savior
his blood cleansed my spring
blood of my beautiful King

his body revived the light fruit
healed the deep roots
body of my beautiful King
life to everything
my beautiful King.

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2004-09-16 04:10 AM

Yeah, you make me happy. He's awesome.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2004-09-16 12:56 PM

This is a song! Look:

oh thorns cannot sing
despair clouds everything

the refrain . . . this is amazing!

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

3 posted 2004-09-16 06:45 PM

=) thanks =) I love you guys, lol.

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

4 posted 2004-09-28 10:22 AM

an excelent lament, all the more reason for me to check these forums more often.

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.
KuruShio (DeadlyBob)

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2004-09-28 01:36 PM

I took it as a song too, hope it is. Beautiful work indeed.

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

6 posted 2004-09-28 08:24 PM

Lament? oh no, this is not a lament, he is not dead anymore! ...ok so maybe it is...but I thought I would point that out anyways

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

7 posted 2004-09-28 10:42 PM

Whoa, bloody hell. I love your poems River. Nice work.

Hollow.
Courts.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

8 posted 2004-09-29 07:21 AM

wow amazing stuff

really enjoyed it.

really good write

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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