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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-09-14 02:58 AM

Do you feel anything?
Anything for me?
Or is what you feel
About yourself,
Again.

Open my eyes
Now…?
The raven iris gives you nothing,
So why should you give any
Back.

I have my answer
Even if the question never left my lips
I know,
That I never knew you,
But I can shake my head and laugh
The clown’s stolen laughter,
As if child’s play would amuse you,
Surprise, I shout, Surprise,
It does.

Come back from Never Never Land,
And grow up,
I’m not staying here any longer,
The chance has gone,
Checkmate.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

1 posted 2004-09-14 04:06 AM

hey.
cool poem, i like, i like a lot.
just one line "the raven iris gives you nothing" i didnt really get, it, who's eye were you refering to? its probably clear, im just dumb...
i like your line about "back from never, never land"-were you saying that a school today? i think i heard you say it...lol, it reminds me of the line in "enter the sandman" hehe, i even sang it after i read it lol
i should stop now. anyway awesome poem, yet again.
Kirst.

Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-09-14 03:45 PM

The speaker's eye.

"Open my eyes,
Now...?
The raven iris gives you nothing...."

And yeah I sort of was saying Never Never Land but just because it sounded cool with an english accent.

Hollow.
Lol.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-09-15 02:47 AM

i liked it
wasnt as gud as usual but still i enjoyed it

lol im imagining u saying that in an english accent.... miss ya!

LOR

say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-09-15 02:53 AM

loved it
nothin else to say i just loved all of it!!!!

bubi!

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2004-09-15 01:33 PM

loved the checkmate - perfect!

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