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Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665


0 posted 2004-09-13 04:29 AM


He stood in the snow,
a tear running down his
cheek froze in mid flow,
the black tree watched.

Falling dark and silent
the snow picked up pace.
How could he be overcome
by the beauty of snow?

Blacker than it had ever
looked, ironically by being
soaked by white snow, the
tree with it's twisted branches was silent.

He felt it watching him,
playing tricks with the eyes
it appeared dead, but
was far from that, being dormant.

He could have sworn he
saw it's branch move to
shake snow from it, or
did the snow fall alone?

Orange and pink, the sky glowed
high above the tree's black
bony bare branches. He crunched
through the snow, standing closer to it now.

Fissures in it's bark opened as
his shadow fell onto it's trunk,
inside he saw it, deep red,
liquified and running throughout....

The supreme happiness in life is the conviction that we are loved. Victor Hugo.

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Purity
Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526
Once Upon, USA
1 posted 2004-09-13 10:06 AM


Poignant and intriguing! Your attention to poetic detail really draws the reader into the scene, making them a part of the scene.
And we see as the man sees. Very good write!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
2 posted 2004-09-13 05:17 PM


Phil?

a gate to . . . hmm?

the start of a good fantasy write?

*smiling*

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