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silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-09-12 03:20 AM



Higher and higher
im falling
higher and higher
falling slower and slower
making no progress
to fit your definition

limitation
lets me crawl
as far as you want me to go
before its time to come back
and serve your purpose
for yet another day

eyelids flutter
moments shudder by
just watching your face
scorn grows
anger shows as i cry
falling deeper into your hate

ambition
of what i want
or what i could be
cut loose by your words
bleeding
and fading into your grasp

lower and lower
i'm growing
lower and lower
in your opinion
im not here
im not good enough
im not worth it

say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean

© Copyright 2004 L - All Rights Reserved
~K~
Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148

1 posted 2004-09-12 04:52 AM


Brilliant. I mean that.

making no progress
to fit your definition

limitation
lets me crawl
as far as you want me to go

!!!

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-09-12 03:48 PM


Loved the same bits as K. I like the higher and higher, lower and lower, at the beginning and end. It had a nice rhythm, a nice flowwwwwwwwwwww. Hm well yes.

Hollow.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2004-09-13 05:03 PM


Laura?

you are worth every bit,
I have many people I would
love to send this too
*smile*

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2004-09-14 02:36 AM


loved it

every bit

agree with what everyone sed here

wow

loveandempathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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