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vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-09-10 11:22 PM

In the mirror stands a girl,
Her hair hangs limp and thin
Her face is shrunken in on itself
Her eyes are unresponsive
Cold, dark, deadened.
The body unrecognisable
Bones jutting through paper thin skin
Like a twig, it seems it will snap.

Outside the mirror stands a girl,
Looking in on herself
Her hair hangs limp and thin
Her face is swollen
Threatening to escape the mirror
Her body, just as gigantic.
Layers of fat cover all trace of bone.
But her eyes remain the same
Cold, dark, deadened.

A tear trickles down one cheek
Making its slow descent
She raises her fist in pure disgust
Punches the mirror, with full force.
Cracked, torn, pieces fall
Breathing hard, body trembling
She stares at her eyes in the distorted mirror
They remain the same
Cold, dark
Dead.

Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

1 posted 2004-09-10 11:23 PM

hey, umm...i forgot to add as a note at the end, this poem, unlike my others, isn't related to my life..it is based on a fictional character.

Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday.

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

2 posted 2004-09-11 12:38 PM

this is cool, I like all the imagery and detail put into this. great job and keep it up. btw i think most of your writings are really cool ( I say most b/c I haven't read all of them...)

~*brezee*~

click1
Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

3 posted 2004-09-16 07:33 PM

It takes a broad mind to see both sides of the mirror.

Well done!

Click

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

4 posted 2004-09-17 12:34 PM

Great Kirsty. I think this is the best, honest. Flawless, it lingers in my mind now and it's taken me half an hour to reply.

Spectacular write.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

5 posted 2004-09-17 07:56 AM

this is an amazing write.... i know these thoughts.... although that is all in the past this brought everything back.. reminding me of where i have come from... this is amazing... absolutely amazing.... i love all your work... the more of it i read the more jealous im getting of your writing...
keep them comin..
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

peaceful_dreamer
Member

since 2003-04-25

Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

6 posted 2004-09-19 12:43 PM

Wow - this is really good. I know how your character feels, and I'm sure many others do too. You have a beautiful talent.

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2004-10-05 04:55 PM

This is cool. Its kinda like what I'm starting to do. I have my own world and I don't really care if its real or not, but its there. hehe.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2004-10-06 09:36 AM

it just goes to show that no matter who/what we are:

all of us hurt

Nicely done, I like the transition.

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