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silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-09-09 03:29 AM



its not my fault
im just lost inside your eyes
blind to your selfish taste
and numb to your perfection
and its not my choice
to follow you so self-consciously
letting you rule my mind
and take over my body
sending messages to my brain
manipulating my innocence
breaking all spirit i once had
tearing away at my insides
playing around with my organs
loosing control of my limbs
attatching yourself once again to another

and while you ignore me
my mind is blank
and my body mine again
messages are sent independently
my innocence maintained
slow spirit mending
insides placing themselves back together
organs healing as i waste away
lose control of my own limbs
and don't know what to do with myself
when you attatch yourself to her

say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean

© Copyright 2004 L - All Rights Reserved
vampiana
Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
1 posted 2004-09-09 05:21 AM


very good poem...loved it in fact. i love the way you write...i don't know how you say your writing isn't natural...it certainly seems to just flow...keep it up, look forward to whatever your next poem has to bring.

"Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
2 posted 2004-09-09 07:48 AM


nicely written.... love your work...
i love how you can write poems with so much emotion....
im jealous
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
3 posted 2004-09-09 05:32 PM


They certainly hit the nail on the dot about this one...hehehe

I love saying that. It sounds so  weird.

Okay then, anyways.
amazing write.
You are a very amazing writer,
and definelty natural...
Kant wait to hear more.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

brezee
Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

4 posted 2004-09-09 10:16 PM


This is so cool, I love this! *sigh* it happens that way though, sometimes ya think ya love 'em but it's better without them...I think I learned that sometime this past summer haha...anywho, keep up the awesome work and as always, great write...


~*brezee*~

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
5 posted 2004-09-11 09:47 PM


What a leech! Only in reality the leech left you and you bled this poem. I can't think of a great reply, but I did truly love it.....meow/miaow. Um Um...next weekend are you free? And send me the tape of that song.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

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