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vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-09-08 04:58 AM

When shall the rain fall?
The black clouds are fit to burst
Dark, ready to explode
They cannot keep it inside
And so the refreshing raindrops begin to fall
An easy release, seemingly so simple.

She locks it all up, tries to throw away the key
Wishing to be a raincloud
Her pressure is building, fizzing warningly
But still the lid is kept shut.

Blinking back prickling tears, burning cheeks
Her mouth stays a frozen line
Ignoring her personal raging storm, as the thunder claps overhead
Letting it continue to grow, a swirling, seething mass
Until it simply cannot be contained.

In the calm before the storm
Some say you could have heard a pin drop
A cold eery silence, fumagated the hallway like toxic gas
But as sudden as the silence came, it was lost
Replaced by high pitched screaming, full body crying
Shoulders quivering, she claws at her face, rips at her hair
The black seeping out, oozing from every pore
Her bleeding heart exposed, she flees.

Running to the bleakest, darkest corner, hidden from sight like a monster
She trembles, not only from sheer cold, but from fear.
Fear that now they know, now they all know
She can't cover, can't lie, can't pretend, because now they know.
Consoled only by the feeling of the black, being gone
But crouching in the mud, shaking with anxiety
She wonders, was this a fair trade?

"Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

1 posted 2004-09-09 01:00 AM

omg

i am in shock
this is amazing
i have no idea what to say, its just so raw and true and it dusnt hold bak...... was it laura hu sed dat? i think maybe.

wow

amazed

loveandempathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

2 posted 2004-09-11 12:56 PM

HOLY! swear! haha, I'm at a loss for words, as well...whew!..."Ignoring her personal raging storm, as the thunder claps overhead
Letting it continue to grow, a swirling, seething mass
Until it simply cannot be contained."....i LOVE THIS! awesome job!...wowee!...

~*brezee*~

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

3 posted 2004-09-11 01:48 AM

Thats a pretty freaking sweat poem.
Nice job on the bloody details. lol.
-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time. -Ecclesiastes 3:11

~K~
Member

since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

4 posted 2004-09-12 06:35 AM

This is a good title. Solid, engaging. The poem seems to run a little long though. That is probably just me though since I have a really short attention span. I enjoyed it regardless.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2004-09-13 04:58 PM

Kirsty:

this is amazing!

it reminds me of Pink Floyd's,
"The Wall" as one trapped inside
oneself wanting to get out yet afraid
to show what is inside . . .

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

6 posted 2004-09-14 01:34 AM

thanks for the comment littlewing.
lol. i've got 'the wall' on dvd. its so cool.

Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

7 posted 2004-11-05 04:27 AM

blah.

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

8 posted 2004-11-05 04:28 AM

sorry..just gotta write something so i can put it in my library..i blimming forgot AGAIN

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