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vampiana
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Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-09-08 04:20 AM



I try to get away from you
But I can't
You are my addiction
The oxygen
I need to live.

But now I'm drowning
I can't breathe
Choking on too much air
My mind is not the same
My actions not even my own
Just carbon copies
Of how I think
You might act, feel, move.

I try to get away
Break my addiction to you
My poisoned mind is breaking down
I love you so much,
I hate you
Yet i don't even know you
It feels like my purpose is to be with you
Then I hang my head in shame
Hating for being like everyone else
Just another one of the masses
But no one, none of them, see you
The way I do.
They don't understanf you at all
I see past your voice and looks
I see into your soul, your inner core.

Smother me now
Before I fall
Completely into
Insanity.

"Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain

© Copyright 2004 Kirsty - All Rights Reserved
soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 711
Colorado
1 posted 2004-09-08 04:30 AM


Wonderful...
The last lines are especially memorable and effective.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
2 posted 2004-09-08 10:18 PM


damn chik...

I loved this...
The ending was the best.

I know how it fels, been there and done that, and dont ever wanna go there again. It hurts.

Like i said before...Damn

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

brezee
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since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

3 posted 2004-09-08 11:29 PM


Sweet action! I really like this...and I, along with others, I'm sure, can or have been able to relate at one point in time...awesome job, I love how you can feel it as you read it...keep up the great work!


~*brezee*~

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
4 posted 2004-10-22 03:05 AM


tra la la

"I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson

vampiana
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Nothing and Nowhere
5 posted 2004-10-22 03:05 AM


tra la la la LA
darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
6 posted 2004-10-22 04:25 AM


lovely

feelin betta? after you let all that out???

i know its hard for you.

love and empathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
7 posted 2004-10-22 04:48 AM


huh? let what out? whats hard? im confused, i wrote this poem like AGES ago....
those "tra la la" things, were cuz i needed to post something to put it into my library, cuz i haven't figured out another way yet..and i forgot the first time, so i had to do it again.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
8 posted 2004-10-22 08:15 AM


Well New Or Old, The Poem Was Great, And I Like Most Of The Others LOVED The Ending...

I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~

Much Luv,
~!~"Trina"~!~

News_From_Nowhere
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since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
CU, NY
9 posted 2004-10-22 09:54 AM


"Choking on too much air"...
There's always something refreshing
in each of your sullen writes!
'Nother good'un!!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm"

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
10 posted 2004-10-22 06:51 PM


Weird, our conversation was sort of like that, as someone said before, last lines were awesome.
Great write.

Hollow.
Courts.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

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