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vampiana
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Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-09-08 12:55 PM



Curled in a ball on the cold hard floor.
Soft sobs echo through my wretched body
Knife held limply, lines scattered across my arm
Too weak, to even restrain, depising my own release
Screaming for help, the sounds do not reach, their deaf ears.
Giving up is much easier
Dreams of weight being lifted from my shoulders
Far fetched and so far away from any reality
I live in these dreams, protected from people
People, the girls with turned up noses
And boys with transparent glances
Girls consumed with disaproving sniffs, flowing blond hair, skinny wrists
Unblemished skin, scarfree arms, wrapped around their most prized possession.
Smirking at your loneliness, that theres no guy beside you
Guys themselves, shrug their indifference
Just a blurry, ugly girl is all they see.
Too busy feeling up their tarty girlfriend
Passing me by, ignored by all, affection from none
Condemned to never be wanted, pushed aside for better horizons
The bell rings
And I'm left alone in the empty corridor
Doors slaming shut in my face.

"Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain

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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-09-08 01:52 AM


Oh wow....I love your work. I love this poem, it's just so true and real life, so real life, so so real life.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
2 posted 2004-09-08 02:41 AM


wow ! oh my,,,,

I live in these dreams, protected from people
People, the girls with turned up noses
And boys with transparent glances


i loved that so much.......

btw.... ur lines about the knife, cuz of that ur poem might get taken off the board so just beware... happened to us before!

LOR

say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
3 posted 2004-09-08 10:01 PM


Hmmm...wow.

I really loved this one. I definetely know how you feel, when it comes to this aspect. I have gotten used to it though. After so many years..you start to get numb to it.

It is sort of ironic though. I am freinds with a lot of people that sometimes feel the same way, and they are beautiful and popular, and have everything, yet they feel unwanted and alone too....

Of course, there are still a lot of those girls, and many of those guys...i definetley know how you feel.

Amazing write.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
4 posted 2004-09-09 12:24 PM


Thanks guys, i really value everything you have to say. Positive feedback gives you the best feeling!!! lol

"Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain

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