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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
You were only ten when I first saw you comfortable in this modern haven mess living the life whose price no one knew. You were comfortable inside yourself never came out of your ancient home you said it was safer among the dead. I oversaw the construction of your mind built each thought and fantasy with care put everything inside so you could know. You were made paranoid by my design with a language only a few ever knew so your life could stay esoteric and lost to remain between us until the last day. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
hmmm...i like it. It is sort of creepy, but i like it. It was fun to read, because it was different. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
wow! different! i really liked! almost like a story that id like to hear more of! cool! LOR say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Hidden undertones of a message dear to many... and feared by many. Awesome! "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Your writing intrigues me. It's like you suddenly appeared in my narrow line of sight and put these images, these thoughts and idea's there. I liked the poem, deeply. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
I have always loved the dichotomies of potential meanings in your excellent work, fractal. I have my own relatings to this one from those having serious troubles "opening doors", and from this point of view, your ode is inspirational. Again, great job constructing deep, poetic imagery for me. Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God, Kevin . . . this reminded me of Gollum. It is brilliant, scarysweet. |
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