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when will it stop? |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
When will it stop? These lonely nights, i try not to cry, but it is something i cannot fight. I miss you so much, the way things used to be. The way we held each other tight, and helped eahother, find the light. But the moment you left, my world turned dark. Like the day turns into night. The crying wouldnt stop. I felt so alone, nothing felt right. I dont know what happened, all i know is you are gone, and nothing can ever be the same. -Karissa ...i know this is short, and probably not my best, but it helps... Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Nothing needs improving. It's a sad, and true poem, and I loved it so much. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Nice poem. In my experience there's nothing wrong with crying. I wish I could do it a little more often. It is cathartic and healthy in many respects. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Thank you both for your replys. I really appreciate them. I dont usually cry very much, but lately, i cant seem to stop, and sometimes i will catch myself crying, and not know completely why. I hate it at night, because i just lay there in bed, and i have to think about it at somepoint, and as soon as i do, i start to cry, until i fall asleep, thats how it has been for the past feww days, actually for a couple weeks now. It makes me feel drained, emotionally and physically. Anyways, thanks for the comments. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148 |
I am so sorry that you have been down. But I agree that crying is a vital release, (whether you know why you're doing it or not!) Just remember, This to shall pass... |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Thanks ~K~. as i read this i got a smile on my face. Probably the first one in a while. "This too shall pass..." It reminded me of a movie i have seen, where the guy has major problems, and is told to just say: "This too shall pass.." It is going to bug me though, because i cant remember the name of it... Anyways, thanks for the comments so far. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I also find nothing wrong with this poem...sometimes it's nice to be able to write and just get all of your feelings out into the open. And crying? There is nothing wrong with that either...it's just another way to help release your feelings and like fractal007 said, it's perfectly healthy. This poem was great...  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
this is good, sad but good. crying is the way to release pain. it will end. you will feel better. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Thanks you guys...for all the comments. It has been a tough couple of weeks. I am glad you like the poem, or at least told me you did..lol it meant a lot. Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
this is an awesome poem, and so true to life. you're one talented poet. "Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is beautiful and i know exactly how you feel.... although i havent been crying i wish i could... i feel more emotionally drained because i cant.... you will be fine, keep your head high, a smile on your face, and a song in your heart. you will be okit will pass in time... again i say, your poetry is beautiful Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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