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brezee
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since 2003-06-02
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0 posted 2004-09-02 10:31 PM


Oh, what a best friend you are!
I could never dream of not having you.
But sometimes you disappoint me
Some things that happen, some things you do
I can't tell you why, but it saddens me
At times.
I guess I do have the right
And I think part of the reason is...
Well...it's stupid to fight.
I'll just let it go
And later get over it
Oh don't worry I'm used to it.
But remember one thing,
I will NEVER forget it.
In fact, It'll just build up inside
Until I finally lose control...


~hmmm....well, as you may be able to tell, this is, indeed, more of a rant. And although it is, I still had thoughts that ryhmed so I threw those in there...if there're any improvements you think I could make to this, to make it flow better or something, just come out with it...thnx~

~*brezee*~

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aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
1 posted 2004-09-03 05:25 AM


i wouldnt change this in any way....
i think you have written a beautiful poem even if it a vent.... some times the best work imaginable comes from venting our emotions because if they dont we explode and end up hurting someone we never meant to...
nice write and keep up the writing... even vents..
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

brezee
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since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

2 posted 2004-09-03 11:30 PM


haha I don't think I could have come up with anything like that so good job lol. and yea, it's hard to try and not actually blow up on ppl. I, myself, sometimes go outta my way just to not hurt ppl haha...mom says maybe I'm too nice...i guess it's better than too mean...but thank you, aussie, for replying.


~*brezee*~

brezee
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since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

3 posted 2004-09-03 11:31 PM


haha I don't think I could have come up with anything like that so good job lol. and yea, it's hard to try and not actually blow up on ppl. I, myself, sometimes go outta my way just to not hurt ppl haha...mom says maybe I'm too nice...i guess it's better than too mean...but thank you, aussie, for replying.


~*brezee*~

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