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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Is our laughter hollowed? Because we feel? Are we pretending to feel nothing at all? I have held your hand, alone, But out here, in the “real” world, You will not give me a second glance, I think I am faking this pain, To get a look from you, When I’m out on this good behavior bond, will you turn away again? I’m afraid you will say, that it’s fiction, When I am saying, it is fact, I’ll joke my hollow joke, Understand what you are going through When I don’t I was hurt You were hurt Both are hurting, deep, Touch my cheek, tell me everything is ok, I’ll believe you for a moment, Capture it on video, So I can replay my trust in you, When it is dried and flaking, And you have turned your back on me. Settle now, hush, hush, That’s what you do, Hush, hush, It never happened, go back to sleep, Don’t open this lock, and interrupt my thoughts. I never met you. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
woah. so good so true i no the meaning behind this one, and i really agree. such an awesome way of writing it too! LOR "When i close my eyes, i remember how to smile, under my umbrella im an accomplished exile..." |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Courtney: this entire write is amazing especially the very end . . . and here: Touch my cheek, tell me everything is ok, I’ll believe you for a moment, Capture it on video, So I can replay my trust in you, |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Touche' ! And the "You" of which is so eloquently yet tragically spoken... I know too well myself. Thanks you for your words. This one made its "mark" on me... Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself... |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
As i read this, tears came to my eyes... I am going through something right now, that is pretty much the same thing...When we are alone, he is so sweet, and caring, then, at school, i would be lucky, if he even looked at me... I am so sick of it...i mean, it disnt used to be like this, jsut in the last couple weeks, i dont know what happened.... Very amazing write..i could feel it. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Lor - as usual, a positive and encouraging response, now show me some of your stuff! littlewing - Thank you, very much Purity - No, thank you, for taking the time to read my work Karissa - Good luck, and thanks. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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