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spritrider87
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0 posted 2004-08-30 12:58 PM



Running
Falling
Failing
To get away

Constant
Painful
Fear
Deep inside my heart

Tearing me away
Tearing me apart
Tearing out my heart
Running from a monster

Trying
Fighting
Watching
Something in me change

Am I running
From a monster
Or is it
In my head

Something
Isn't right
Something
Isn't being said

It's not
Inside of me
It's not
Inside my head

Running
Falling
Failing
To get away

Constant
Painful
Fear
Deep inside my heart

Tearing me away
Tearing me apart
Tearing out my heart
Running from a monster

Thats me
Inside
And
Out

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

© Copyright 2004 Jian Sterry - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 2004-08-31 03:19 PM


Jian,

this is amazing . . .
a true look into oneself
I applaud you

PainBaneChaos
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The point of no return
2 posted 2004-09-01 07:30 PM


Apparently I'm not the only one with esp...
kissa~rachelle
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Posts 988
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3 posted 2004-09-03 11:40 PM


wow, i really loved this, and i think more poeple should haev replied. Grrr...

I loved the way ou were able to pull of saying those lines over again, without it totally taking away. Amazing.

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

littlewing
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4 posted 2004-09-07 02:22 PM


I also wanted to tell you this
reminded me - pure and simple,
of complete paranoia . . .
nice writing

MGROVES
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5 posted 2004-09-07 05:56 PM


fear comes in all forms, you are stronger than you realize. keep writing it out


KuruShio
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6 posted 2004-09-07 11:24 PM


ooh, well at least i'm not the only monster out there

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.  
KuruShio  (DeadlyBob)

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
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7 posted 2004-09-08 02:26 AM


Wow. A bit repetative to begin with but then. Wow. It was great and I read it all, that means its great and I loved it. That's a big accomplishment for me today, I am so tired. Oic u have posted more today, i'll go read.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

vampiana
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8 posted 2004-09-09 02:16 AM


awesome. really liked it, i definitely saw the stuff about paranoia.

"Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain

spritrider87
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9 posted 2004-09-15 05:04 PM


thanks everyone. and yeah i guess paranoia is apparent in it. Thanks for all the replies. the monster thanks you too.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

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