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green_itchy_stuff
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0 posted 2004-08-27 02:42 PM



She tries to save the world
And you trip and fall
Flat faced on the ground
Stand alone or not at all

Its something inside that screams
Its something inside that hurts
It burns it makes you cry
Rusted passion from the dirts

Feel it drain and leave
Like dying and soul collaspe
Push push push
Filth of effort traps

Under the pressure of responsibility
They tip and swayed his mind
Run away to meet my duty
Jailer of the broken kind

Understanding by sighted evidence
Documented proof display
The ego world tipsy swirled
And God stands in dismay

No turning back, this time, no walking away -Kutless

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
kissa~rachelle
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nowhere special
1 posted 2004-08-28 08:26 PM


I loved this. The end was the best. But the poem as a whole was also really good.

I love reading your poems. They seem to aways draw my attention...

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

green_itchy_stuff
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2 posted 2004-08-29 04:13 PM


Thank you.  

No turning back, this time, no walking away -Kutless

KuruShio
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3 posted 2004-08-30 03:13 PM


Bloody genius, this is abstract enough to twist the mind while gently staying where it was ment to go.

quite well done gis

green_itchy_stuff
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4 posted 2004-08-30 10:26 PM


thank you kuru.  And I thought I was just a shredded individual thread.
-GIS

No turning back, this time, no walking away -Kutless

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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5 posted 2004-08-31 03:21 PM


Craig,

I want to steal this phrase:

Rusted passion

it is brilliant . . .

green_itchy_stuff
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6 posted 2004-08-31 09:02 PM


Have at it littlewing.
-GIS

Laney
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7 posted 2004-08-31 09:49 PM


must agree...and Jailer of the broken kind...phantasic

PainBaneChaos
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The point of no return
8 posted 2004-09-01 07:38 PM


If they're allowed to steal phrases, can I steal the entire first paragraph?
green_itchy_stuff
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9 posted 2004-09-01 11:08 PM


Just the first paragraph, but only if you let me read what you write by e-mail.  Just want to see.  And littlewing if you see this e-mail me yours too.  You post so often that I'm not sure where to ever look for your new ones.  Or I just don't get on often enough.
-GIS

littlewing
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10 posted 2004-09-02 09:47 PM


hey Craig, I just made it back here and you would see it posted for sure with thanks to you . . . *smile*
vampiana
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Nothing and Nowhere
11 posted 2004-09-14 04:24 AM


loved it. so far, my favourite one, i've read by you.

Tomorrow, is the today we feared yesterday.

green_itchy_stuff
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12 posted 2004-09-15 02:03 AM


thank you vampiana.  I used to write all bloody but now, at least for now,  this is it.  
-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

River
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since 2003-09-16
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my own little world
13 posted 2004-09-15 05:19 PM


wow...yeah. I know what you mean. this one got to me also, great job!

    - Bon

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
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14 posted 2004-09-16 01:41 AM


Thank you from the Jordan River to you River Jordan.  God rocks.  wow, the God rocks thing could be a poem.
-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

peaceful_dreamer
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SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW
15 posted 2004-09-19 12:24 PM


Wow. I'm left speechless. This is really great. The first I've read of yours, and I look forward to so much more!

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

symphony_of_thoughts
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since 2003-08-03
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Somewhere
16 posted 2004-09-19 03:31 PM


I liked this, usually when I hear rhyme it sounds forced but this flowed well, I can't rhyme and make it sound un-forced myself.
green_itchy_stuff
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Posts 1929
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17 posted 2004-09-20 01:40 AM


thank you peaceful.  I'll have more soon.

Sometimes it is hard to ryhme and let it flow smoothly symphony, I guess you just have to give it more patience.

-GIS

He has made everything beautiful in its own time.  -Ecclesiastes 3:11

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