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spritrider87
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since 2003-05-31
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NH

0 posted 2004-08-23 01:49 PM



What happens when you feel a connection
To people you don't even know
People that could be thousands
Maybe millions of miles away
When you dream of being an animal
And in that dream others are there
All different animals
But all heading the same way
All going to the same place
When you feel a connection
You once felt before your life
Fell to pieces
A connection with everything Natural
Not just others with the connection
But with Nature herself
And the stars
Wind
Rain
Dark
Light
Everything
Do you continue to let the connection deepen
Grow
Spread
Do you continue dreaming a dream
Once forgotten
Where you were once
A black and silver wolf
With sleek fur
And bright eyes
Strong
Resiliant
And independent
But now
You are still that wolf
Still silver and black
But your fur is matted
Dusty
Dirty
Your not so strong anymore
In fact you walk with a limp
You are weak now
And afraid
But the others help
Show you love
Even if it is only a dream
Caused by connections
In the dream
You are all walking on a beach
But next to the woods
I'm lost
Confused
Hurt
Angry
Sad
Alone
And afraid
Very afraid
But the dream
The connection
It's all comforting
It is all so familiar
And most of all
It feels safe
But what happens
If one of us dies
Or someone i know
Who I'm not connected too
Dies
If you make connections
They get broken
And I dont know
If I can handel loosing anything
But the even greater question is
What happens if I DON'T make the connection
Do I fade away
Do I loose this feeling of belonging
Of safety
Love
And protection
I'm lost
Confused
Hurt
Angry
Sad
Alone
And afraid
But I think I know the answer
To my questions
I'm going to keep the connection
Let it grow
Deepen
Become stronger
I will connect with everything
And I will continue my fight
Because eventually
That wolf will be it's same old self
On the outside that is
But inside
It will be wiser
stronger
And smarter
Because it knows
Not to take the connection for granted
And I do too
That wolf is me
And I am it
And I am growing
Everyday
And learning what it takes
To keep my connection going
To keep it strong
Natural connection is my choice
What about you
Do you have what it takes
The answer is yes
But it is all up to you
And you alone
To start that connection

Ice

lost and afraid i am calling out to you light angel.

© Copyright 2004 Jian Sterry - All Rights Reserved
brezee
Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

1 posted 2004-08-23 03:35 PM


sweet! this is a VERY good message,I like the way you wrote this...everything about it flows really good, I also like the repeatitiveness in some spots, I think you restated it at good times in the whole poem...Great job and keep it up!


~*brezee*~

Manth88
Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 45
IL, USA
2 posted 2004-08-23 04:04 PM



Hey,

This is a great poem...Long...But Great!! I hope to read more that are this deep... Good Job!!!

!^*Manth88*^!

PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17
Posts 150
The point of no return
3 posted 2004-08-23 06:33 PM


I had a dream like that once.  It's what stemmed one of my poems.  I believe I titled it Please?  I thouhgt it was clever because when said out loud you couldn't tell whether it was Please? Or Pleas? Anyway, I'm rambling.  My point being I love this, and I have quite the inkling of what this Natural Connection is, and it governs my life. I never wuld have thought to write about it, however.  Kudos
Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-08-24 04:18 AM


I enjoyed very much. It was peaceful at the start and it made me peaceful. I wouldn't say it was un-peaceful at the end. Just took a different route. I felt like you were saying to me "Close your eyes and think you are there, this wolf....." and it had a great ending. I compliment.

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
5 posted 2004-08-25 06:55 PM


I have a hard time following others into whatever.  Actually I used to be a witch.  Something about it that I realized though is an idol whether made of wood or stone set halfway on or off of something will tip and fall.  And as far as I'm concerned those who worship it might as well consider themselves fallen.  And the same way with trees and grass and anything else in nature.  What happens when you cut a tree down?  It falls. So since we, as in people; are in total dominance over this stuff why do you want to worship it.  Before I didn't think so, but now it feels a bit foolish to do so.
-GIS

No turning back, this time, no walking away -Kutless

spritrider87
Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294
NH
6 posted 2004-08-27 11:27 AM


hey green i dont worship the stuff. i talk to it. even the trees and stuff that are dying or have fallen they all have a story to tell you just have to be willing to listen. everyone eles thanks esp. PBC i'll e-mail you . It's nice to see so many replies to something i wrote.

lost and afraid i am calling out to you light angel.

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7 posted 2004-09-07 06:18 PM


very spiritual, feeling connected to nature and animals. i too feel that way, and see things. let your spiritual side go and see where it takes you. dont let chaos or pain interfer, learn to detatch from them. your very strong, very spiritul. i can feel it


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