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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
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0 posted 2004-08-22 10:18 AM


Do you follow
do you follow well the lines which stray on their usual down.
I found a spot, its empty,
I found a place that is not for me.
and the words come out choppy, as I speak, then gasp. and attempt to speak again.
I'm trying to refamilarize myself into the monotony, and make myself be all the colors at once.
To fall short in pale comparison.
A raging beige, verging on yellow.
Do you follow,
do you follow how I sing my tune with the passion I used to feel for you
But now I must disguise.
This is the usual way down
just follow my eyes along til you meet hard against compact soil.
A grave were digging with the steady resistance of our hearts.

© Copyright 2004 Alexis Smith - All Rights Reserved
brezee
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since 2003-06-02
Posts 140

1 posted 2004-08-23 01:07 PM


I really like this, I like how you used the colors in it..."I'm trying to refamilarize myself into the monotony, and make myself be all the colors at once.
To fall short in pale comparison.
A raging beige, verging on yellow."...that's cool. Great job! btw, I like reading your poetry but, as with some others, a lot of times I like them but, I'm not sure what to say lol...I'm sure you may know the feeling...again, awesome write and keep up the great work!


~*brezee*~

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