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PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

0 posted 2004-08-17 01:42 PM

Your selfishness bound me,
as real as the shackles I wore.
Chained to you, resentfully doring.
Hanging on to word and whim,
manacles biting vulnerable skin.
I trudged behind,
your faithful pet,
toiling for your smile.
Waiting for those treasured words,
to relese me from my servitude.
Suspense beading with sweat
fingers
tap
tap
tapping,
fiddling with the locks.
But I was left wanting.

Not been my week, I'm sorry for the flooding.

~K~
Member

since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

1 posted 2004-08-18 01:17 AM

Sorry it has been a bad week for you. Looks like a good week for poetry though! Really liked this one.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-08-18 01:30 AM

nice.
i really liked this one. powerful. deep. dark
i really commend you on this! i read it 3 times just for the thrill of the words!

nice job
LOR

"When i close my eyes, i remember how to smile, under my umbrella im an accomplished exile..."

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-08-18 04:28 AM

I don't know why I haven't replied to your poems, because they are sure as hell great. I like this one though...being chained to another and following them as they pull you along...good topic, awesome writing.

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

4 posted 2004-08-18 11:28 AM

Thank you muchly everyone! It does seem a good time for writing lately. I think my pen has a mind of its own.

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

5 posted 2004-08-18 11:46 PM

i like this one too!...the tap tap tapping part is cool how you did that...i wish my writes were as vivd as yours...and you had better of course lol...great job!

~*brezee*~

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

6 posted 2004-08-18 11:48 PM

Thanks. Writers' bane, however, plagues me. My overactive imagination lets me imagine and write things so vividly that I give myself nightmares more often that not.

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