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darkness_witch
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0 posted 2004-08-17 02:36 AM


I am so scared
So scared of what is going to happen
When you tell me
That we're over
Because I wake up for you
I live at the prospect of you taking my hand
And me feeling safe
In your hold
And I wake up for you
I wake up to hope you smile when you see me
To hope you sit next to me
And warm my icy heart

I will die when the day arrives
When you rip my heart in two
I will die because I will have nothing
Nothing to live for
Nothing to lift my spirits
Nothing

You are my world
And I already know
I am not yours
And it kills me
I love you with all my heart
But I know you dont
And im praying
Day and night
That you could

But Im so scared
For when the day arrives
I will cry
A thousand tears
That have been locked inside
For as long as I can remember
And each tear
Will be for you
Each tear
Will be for my memories
Each tear
Will rip me
And tear me in two

I am so scared

*ramblings, bear with me. any comments are welcome*

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

© Copyright 2004 Sophie A Ryan - All Rights Reserved
Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-08-17 02:43 AM


It might never happen, and I hope it never does. Not as good as your others, but because your poems are as great as great can be, I still think this is a great poem. Now I'm just babbling, babble, babble, babble, babble. Oh, it makes me so sad, it's a sad poem Sophie, don't be scared, keep your nightlight on...ok? Although the light might scare away nasty under-bed monsters...hope it scares away the other monsters. Maybe (nameless) is your nightlight and your afraid (nameless)'ll have a power cut. Hehehe, this is getting fun.

Sorry, for taking so much time to reply, this a lonnnnnnnnnnnnnng reply.

Hollow.
Courtney.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

muted
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2 posted 2004-08-17 02:45 AM


love lost does truly hurt.
it hurts worse when the one who leaves
is still in love with you...

so if the one leaving doesnt love you anymore, find the strength to carry on...

and breathe deep girl

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
3 posted 2004-08-17 06:47 AM


heya.... another brilliant poem......
i know what your saying and going thru coz its happening to me right now.....
ne wayz this is beautiful, emotional and well another great poem from you darkness.....
keep your head high, stay strong, keep pushin on
keep on writing
Mel

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-08-18 01:16 AM


i also hope (nameless) and u will not ever be over. U guys r really good for each other and everyone can see that! but remember if it doesnt work out then i was never ment to.. and there r plenty other fish in the sea that u will love just as much

great poem
i thought it was just as good
liked it lots

LOR

"When i close my eyes, i remember how to smile, under my umbrella im an accomplished exile..."

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
5 posted 2004-08-18 02:19 AM


sigh

thanx so much everyone for ur comments. i appreciate them.

loveandempathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
6 posted 2004-08-18 04:46 AM


"You can't sigh in detention!"

Sorry, it was on recess.
Had the urge.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19
Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket
7 posted 2004-10-10 01:17 AM


Ahhhhh
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-Bows-
Amazing.
Yes..

Amazing.

Thank You.
<3
Persephone..

I believe that lovers should be tied together and thrown into the ocean in the worst of weather and left there to drownin their innocence

*Alli4000*
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8 posted 2004-10-10 11:56 PM


"I am so scared
So scared of what is going to happen
When you tell me
That we're over"


Woah. You totally read my mind and wrote it out.
Thanks for sharing!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

Gothika_07
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since 2004-01-15
Posts 61
new zealand
9 posted 2004-10-12 11:28 PM


Guess who?
WOW what more can i say, *utterly speechless* (which is a first for me) loved it sooo much.

keep writing more c yaz 2moro (L)

R.I.P RIVER JUDE PHOENIX

bex

"I have a hard time keeping from drowning in this crazy buisness" - River Phoenix 1970-1993

PeaceInEverything
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since 2002-10-06
Posts 31
Ohio, United States
10 posted 2004-10-13 06:30 PM


"You are my world
And I already know
I am not yours
And it kills me"

I know how this feels and it hurts both of us...

  I really appreciate you writing this rambling though you say it is.  It says how I feel in the words that I do not have.

Thank you.


  Empathy shall set us free.

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
11 posted 2004-10-13 07:39 PM


Oh wow...i really loved this. I can relate also...and i know exactly how much it hurts...im still not over it, and it happened a little elss than a year ago..(pathetic huh) No, i mean, im over it in a way, but i still love him. A lot.

Anyways, awesome write.

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

spritrider87
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since 2003-05-31
Posts 294
NH
12 posted 2004-10-14 02:44 PM


this is really good. can't say i've felt it befor. haven't let anyone in far enough for them too take over my whole life. but i wish i could. you have a way with words. i felt the emotion behind this.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

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