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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I'll rape the sky in blackened night and bruise the gleam of stars too bold to fall and press my need deeper into the wound left gaping at the horizon just to hear you scream when nothing is all that holds you to me I dont exist unless you believe I'd readily decieve eternity waiting for your reprieve to hear my name in your voice again stealing me relentlessly even when ive no promises left to spend Im broken and forgotten and will beg until the end I dont exist unless you believe |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
*winces* Painfully powerful. And even more painfully truthful. I've been here. Too many people have. Kudos. It's beautiful. Haunting, but beautiful. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
OMG...Dawn, this is achingly magnificent. Another WOW from me babe.  Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. ~Stevie Nicks~ |
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Magician Member
since 2002-08-14
Posts 126 |
Very nicely worded poem. I enjoyed the way the words rolled off the tongue. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wow amazing.........! feeling your pain, stay strong. stand tall. powerful poem. loveandempathy darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
PainBaneChaos: thank you for that, its appreciated  Maree: another "wow" from you..you are too generous! sweetypie cuddle butt LMAO  Magician: thank you for visiting, nice to meet you and hope to see you posting soon darkness: thank you, standing tall is what i do best! LOL |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148 |
Dear muted~ I think this is my favorite one yet. Absolutely beautiful. You mentioned darkness being safer in a reply and I think yes, it might be safer but not nearly as interesting. Still, even in darkness, it's always a good idea to keep your eyes open. That night that I wrote Twister & The Creation of Nothing I wrote several others probably not worth mentioning but this is one of them & I wanted you to see it. Now You See Her Muted still the visions clear chaos reigns here and the whisper echos yes I hear you distance is meaningless but the illusion is still convincing |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
~K~ yes you are right,the darkness doesnt hold the same glories as the things ive seen but once in while, i still visit there, just to remember. Your writing touches me deep, very much like someone i used to ~know~...and i always get an emotional surge every time i read your words. this poem is a gift you have given me, beautiful im blinded |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i believe wonderful write!  Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs |
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