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eor
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0 posted 2004-08-09 04:25 AM



Grouse
Tell me have you seen her?

Tell me have you seen her?

I cant call it, been there, been alcoholic-
Waiting for the next straw to fall out of the sky,
Face one diving, to the ground, as if in slow motion
A notion not much but for emotion, coasting on the next
High I turn to.  I learned to self medicate at an early age
Wage war against myself on hopes of one day being
Protected, not sequestered from the rest of you.

This low I feel is going nowhere, trapped.

I’m breaking down to the foundation of this
Sole, my feet become bare, standing there
In a pool if disillusion, disbelieving, discontent.

It’s not going to be aright tomorrow,
It’s not going to be
“All rizzle fo shizzle”…

Speak to me like a dropout get treated like a dropout.

You stole my women and I want her back,
You broke her apart and not for the better.
She’s dumber, she’s ugly, the up and coming kids
Don’t know how to respect her, they neglect her.

She deserves better, lets bring it back to the romance,
Romantics…a thing many know not of…
A time of love for her, every ounce of thought
Was made in respect of her, not in neglect of her.

Make sure you don’t fall.
She flies high and most don’t
Have the license to fly.

Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs

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1 posted 2004-08-09 07:20 AM


every word of this pounds the pavement
this beat cant be missed
and i think its an awesome
incredible display
of what you are capable of.

damn good job buddy

Hollow_Emptiness
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2 posted 2004-08-10 01:52 AM


Great to see you posting again, great write.

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

mysticpoe
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3 posted 2004-08-10 10:21 AM


Hey eor, Emotion packed as usual. Excellent write as usual. Good to hear from you, I've been hanging around some other sites. What ever happened to littlewing?

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Lexy
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4 posted 2004-08-10 05:21 PM


It seems to me, it could almost be two different poems.
Because your talking about, you
then your talking about her.
But it works.
"This low I feel is going nowhere, trapped."
That's probably how I feel right now.
I always like the stuff you post, even if its not necessarily good, it still is.  


eor
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5 posted 2004-08-11 03:09 PM


thanks guys for the replies...

poe-last i heard from littlewing she left because of some differances here and what not, but then she cam back but i was not online for a while and not sure where she is...hope she comes back...

lexy-yeah, that was how it was supposed to be, i amtalking about me and hoe i feel about 'her'...'her being language and how it has been destroyed...

Pimpin and panderin, on a level you can't serve, dismantle, nouns, pronouns, adverbs, and verbs

mysticpoe
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6 posted 2004-08-11 04:51 PM


Hey eor, message on my thread.

poe

Lexy
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7 posted 2004-08-11 10:37 PM


well now that I know the perspective you were writing from, it makes a lot more sense.
mysticpoe
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8 posted 2004-08-22 08:49 PM


http://b28.ezboard.com/bsaltydreamsbook2

Try this eor.

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