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~K~
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0 posted 2004-07-27 03:07 AM


her hands looked like an afterthought
motivation slanted backwards
caressing another's trash
she gropes towards madness

she hasn't far to travel
before she crosses over
to a realm completely fashioned
out of useless gestures

© Copyright 2004 ~K~ - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2004-07-27 04:38 AM


K~

Enjoyed.

Welcome to Pip and I hope to see you post much more.

Susan

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

silhouetted
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2 posted 2004-07-27 05:17 AM


nice.

sweet and subtle

welcome, look foward ot seein gmore interestin poems

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pee in his/her pants - Brandon

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3 posted 2004-07-27 06:59 AM


harsh
enjoyed
welcome to PIP

LucidityNow
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4 posted 2004-07-27 07:08 AM


wonderful, i read this poem over and over and come up with new senarios and meaning each time. The mark of a great poet is relativity and that is acheived here. great work.

and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me...

yv
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5 posted 2004-07-27 04:54 PM


Welcome to Passions...and I hope to read more of your majesty.  I thought it was beautfiul.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

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6 posted 2004-07-27 06:41 PM


Wow ~K~ . . . your first post and you already left me speechless....

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!

~Alli~

I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughter would make me cry.

Mad_Hatter
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7 posted 2004-07-27 09:19 PM


It's amazing how words, even very few can impact someone greatly.  Very conscise, very excellent.
~K~
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8 posted 2004-07-28 12:07 PM


You are all wonderful! Thanks so much for the kind words. I look forward to peeking into all of your worlds of darkness as well.
Hollow_Emptiness
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9 posted 2004-07-28 12:15 PM


Impressive. Welcome to PIP.

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

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