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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Dogs! They show more loyalty than this that he has shown to me. Meager how the gather'd pack will growl at death she will attack a soft footfall well down the road the bristled neck the stance the scold of the low warn howling thus: "trespassers must die-- it's 'us'" (or them) warns wolf saliva loose slivering the moon into halves that cling-- a lingering warm in stark malignancy "rrrrrrrrrroll" instinctive purr of throat, "Not another step." She broke-- the silence of this night she said: "I am bitch. And you? are dead." |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
And you're up late missy! This really isn't my style, but I liked the last two lines  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Loved it Karen...  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Roaring with laughter here. Bitch. Hmmm. I've been called that a time or two. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, you know what they say... Life is a bitch, and then you become one. whew. It's not even that time of the month either. sheesh. Thanks for reading.  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
hey this was really great. I loved the ending! But i must confess- the title was what brought me to read this good poem, looking forward to more I left my wallet in El Segundo... |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
All I can say is wow. That really felt like the sting of a betraying lover, if you ask me. Enjoyed its "balls-to-the-walls" realism. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a bad night, huh?  M |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
...this is eerie. I liked it though.. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
It sparked my imagination a little. I loved it. The last two lines especially. and the format was fun, i'm gonna have to try it. kissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Was it you that lamented once, "How many poems can you write about the moon?" So they get a little darker, then? Why not Why not e |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, e, just like the moon, I have my phases. And I still lament my own writings. I told a friend who was commenting on how prolific I am with my poetry and I said, "NOT"--I have only written six poems--all the rest are re-writes of those..." shaking my head here--thanks to all for reading my rant. Both here in the reply box and above. I truly don't consider myself a poet. A storyteller? sure, but a poet? tsk... |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
you never cease to give me a new perspective on writing poetry. life *is* a bitch. you gotta bite back. We are all luminous beings, not merely crude creatures of matter. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Serenity Blaze, I applaud you, lady. Hope things worked out tonight. Awhile back, my mom sent me a forward regarding the word, bitch. If I ever get your email I'll send it if I can find it.  ....jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Jo-jo? Would that be the one that states that the word bitch simply means-- Babe In Total Charge of Herself?  On the other hand, I told my daughter once, it was a word invented by men to describe women who have the audacity to behave as if they had the sames rights as men. (raising a militant?) |
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