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Mad_Hatter
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0 posted 2004-07-23 12:40 PM


Infantile in the pressing of
What reflection can this be?
And I’m sure of you
And what happened to me

Try me, but I don’t have a reason
We are what we become
Lost something in the making of
Distances between my abominations
I’ve split this sliver within my hand
Simple in the being of
What monster can this be?
And I’m sure of you
But, who did this to me?

Slipped between some finger tips
Cigarettes and assault burns
Strangulate all vigilance I found in this
Integrity is not a part of thrashing out
Interpreting the difference between being alive
And the simplicity of how I lay you inside…

© Copyright 2004 Ryan - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-23 03:25 PM


hmm, dont know how i havent read you before..
you really really manipulate the reader's emotions...
I feel this
hmm,
will be watching out for your writing from now on.

nice to meet you LOL

Defective
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2 posted 2004-07-24 11:58 PM


And once again I envy you for these beautiful words you write.

Kristi

Mad_Hatter
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3 posted 2004-07-25 10:26 PM


Thank you both for your responces.  Nice to meet you too.
Lexy
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4 posted 2004-07-27 02:05 PM


that ending was awesome
Mad_Hatter
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5 posted 2004-07-27 09:14 PM


I like the ending alot too.  Writing endings seems to be something im good at, in my opinion anyways.  Your response is, again, greatly appreciated.
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