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Mad_Hatter
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0 posted 2004-07-21 07:29 PM


I shan't think i will explain this one, it's very much to do with my life and things i do.  Enjoy. (hopefully)

In the echo of
We are but lost
In the reasoning
this moon is boxed

Preventing me
From being clear
This syndicated memory
Which I now behold
consuming me...

Feel the purpose
As it is now yours
We shall not behold
All of what's undone
I face my eye into the sun

We'll never be so lost
As when this moon
Is boxed...

© Copyright 2004 Ryan - All Rights Reserved
kissa~rachelle
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1 posted 2004-07-21 08:04 PM


I love this. Very kool.

kissa

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2 posted 2004-07-22 01:10 AM


I love this and Im so glad you decided to start posting again. I have always looked forward to reading from you when I read this forum and I hope you keep posting

Kristi

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3 posted 2004-07-26 06:10 PM


The imagery is absolutely dilectable.  I loved it.  I felt a bit of paradise in that, but that may just be my thwarted perception of your poem.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

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4 posted 2004-07-27 07:09 AM


ive read this about 5 times now, and think ive finally understood what it is you are saying....then again, i may just be projecting my own circumstances...
nonetheless...
if this is going where my mind is taking it..its awesome...
any other context... its still a very enjoyable poem.


LucidityNow
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5 posted 2004-07-27 07:16 AM


i really love poetry like this, it not only allows each reader to develop their own meaning of it.....it actually demands it, that is how good it is. bravo.

and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me...

Lexy
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6 posted 2004-07-27 02:00 PM


hmm...
I liked the idea of this. It was very...refreshing.

Mad_Hatter
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7 posted 2004-07-27 09:15 PM


I'd really like to hear your guys' interpretations of this poem, it would be very refreshing and pleasant to see them.  So please post them or e mail them to me or something.
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8 posted 2004-07-28 06:51 AM


check your email, i sent my interpretation
Mad_Hatter
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9 posted 2004-07-28 01:22 PM


hmmm I haven't recieved it yet...
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10 posted 2004-07-28 08:19 PM


ok, i see now that youve recieved it
thanks for that

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