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peaceful_dreamer
Member

since 2003-04-25

Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

0 posted 2004-07-11 09:35 PM

i'm running trough tunnels,
with walls of eyes.
not sure where i'm headed,
not sure where i've been.

confused about everything.
not sure of life.
not sure whether it's day or night.
not sure of who to turn to.

i'm stuck in the middle.
always have been.
i've got to get out.
got to get away.

the eyes are staring at me,
there's no escape.
no door that says "exit" above it.
no light to follow.

i'm so scared. i don't know where
to go. people are messing with
my head. there are no
people.

i break into a run. eager
to get out.
can't see where i'm going.
i can't catch my breath.

hands are coming out of the walls.
reaching, trying to find an arm
to grab, a mouth to muffle a
scream.

the eyes are staring at me,
there's no escape.
no door that says "exit" above it.
no light to follow.

i'm in the tunnel of confusion.
of anger.
of hurt.
it echos.

i'm in a labyrinth of confusion.
of anger.
of hurt.
it echos.

my mind has given up.
now i must reley on my heart,
though i'm not sure it's up to it.
i stop to catch my breath, no, the hands...

the eyes are staring at me,
there's no escape.
no door that says "exit" above it.
no light to follow.

I'm stuck in my mind.

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-07-12 01:33 AM

I enjoyed it. Nice work, good imagery.

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

2 posted 2004-07-12 06:14 AM

i liked thew idea of it
but found it a little bit messy.
loved the lines
i'm in a labyrinth of confusion.
of anger.
of hurt.
it echos.

and

hands are coming out of the walls.
reaching, trying to find an arm
to grab, a mouth to muffle a
scream.

very cool.

darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

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