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darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-07-09 04:20 AM


You look to me with pleading eyes
and i wish i could explain it
your hands search for mine
and my eyes flicker to the ground
I cant stare into the eyes of my closest friend
in case I reveal more about myself
I wish I could confide in you
but I cant trust you, let alone myself
I wish you could understand
but I geuss that would be asking a little too much of you
sometimes I wish my act was better
and I never looked as depressed as I feel
So I smile broadly and laugh my perfect laugh
"Nothings wrong" I say
and you look concerned before asking for reassurance
I nod my head and shrug
why would something be wrong with me
I am, after all, star student
social butterfly
perfect daughter
fun sister
loving girlfriend

self-hating
twisted
deranged
girl

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

© Copyright 2004 Sophie A Ryan - All Rights Reserved
PKreturns
Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362
New Orleans, LA
1 posted 2004-07-09 08:59 AM


You sound a lot like me...except for the whole being a girl thing....
Theory
Junior Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 23
N. CA. USA
2 posted 2004-07-09 09:55 AM


nice write
Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
3 posted 2004-07-11 02:09 AM


I know, love, I know.

Courts,
Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
4 posted 2004-07-11 04:02 AM


i really loved that one.

something about your poems make me nod all the way though them. a lot of them make me feel so sad and lost and i admire the feeling you bring through them.

I can tell that poem was true about you.
True to what you think of yourself.

And though i cant change the way you think about life, and though i never see you anymore, please never forget this soph.

I, and so many other people around you, love you to bits. I can't see my life without what you've made me sophie. I cant thank you more. I just want you to know this okay?

LOR

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pe is his/her pants - Brandon B

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
5 posted 2004-07-11 04:11 AM


Ok both of you, listen up. You are the ones who got me into writing, especially poetry and...mainly dark poetry. Last year was one of the best years of my life and I have to admit I've been pretty down lately, but as I told u Soph, I'm happy being me...and...I don't know, I just wanted to thank you guys. For being there to talk to. Thanks. *Hugs*

Hollow.

(Hey Soph, Lor is gonna stay at my place this week sometime, just wondering if you wanna be there too.)

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
6 posted 2004-07-11 05:58 AM


thnx dudes. i appreciate it.
yea id like to be there courts. jst ask lor for my number. dnt exactly wanna post it here.
i no uve been like dat courts and im glad you can talk to me. i cant talk to ppl wen i feel like dat so im rly glad that u feel comfortable talkin to me.
you no hu to call, gorgeus!
thnx lor for wat u wrote. i forget that and sorta look past it i geuss

yea i dunno


darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
7 posted 2004-07-19 05:58 AM


hey there darkness

this is such an amazing poem. i know exactly what your going thru coz well every on does, but the way you put your feelings down on paper, well its amazing..... you have such amazing talent im getting more and more jealous with every poem i read of yours, they are so real, full of emotion, down to earth, and flow perfectly...

keep up the REAL writing girl.
always around for a chat
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????
i am who i am. no one can change that but me, even then it will be a fight to the death

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