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darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-07-08 02:34 AM

My mind is swollen
From months of thoughts without release
They've taken their toll on me
This moment
Of pure timidness and honesty
Is priceless

If only you were here to share it with me
But you're gone now
Gone for good

I knew I could I talk to you
I felt safe with you
But you grew weak
And I wish I could share this moment with you

But there you go
You're gone for good

My Feet are tired and my hands cold
I want you to hold me tight
And rock me to sleep

I want you to call my name
And hold my hand

But then again,
I want run away
And never look back
I want to fall asleep
And dream forever

My mind cant hold anymore of these thoughts
So its time to take action

You're gone
Gone for good
And I want to join you
Somewhere where we can live together
And be gone for good.

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

1 posted 2004-07-08 02:45 AM

I enjoyed this. It brought tears to my eyes. And pain to the heart. Good write!

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
Graduation : January 29th 2004

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

2 posted 2004-07-08 03:27 AM

thnx heaps for replying.
im glad u enjoyed it
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

3 posted 2004-07-08 04:52 AM

"If it is good say so and why." Your words???? "It is good because it makes so much sense without over using adjectives, as I do." My words.

I am seriously running out of words to describe how you are such a good writer. You make me jealous. What can I say? Good does it no favours. Great, awesome, brilliant, heartfelt, amazing....they don't even begin to tell you how good this poem is. Pleeeeeeeeeeez don't ever stop writing. Especially this good.

(Am I sensitive today? Must be the overuse of mascara getting me all teary...then again...it might be deeper....)

Hollow.
Courts.
xxx

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

4 posted 2004-07-11 04:12 AM

i have no words for this

corts has such a point soph. we cant explain

even though i have family all around me right now, and in the full light and vulnerability of this room, i burst out in tears.

my mum is looking at me like im a lunatic cuz i told her something was just so funny it made me cry. so far from the truth she doesnt realise. I just loved this so much and i never want to see your poems die.

LOR

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pe is his/her pants - Brandon B

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

5 posted 2004-07-29 05:33 AM

It just clicked. Scarlet. Brooke Fraser.

Sophie, Sophie, Sophie what are we going to do with you?

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

6 posted 2004-07-30 02:51 AM

lool yer! scarlet! thats the "clench fists tightly until they almost bleed" song aye.

(mum got it a few weeks ago and i stole it off her. ssshhh)

LOR

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pee in his/her pants - Brandon

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

7 posted 2004-07-30 01:11 PM

this is really good. i understand the want to not be here to sleep forever to be gone with someone. you are really good with your poetry. i dont want it or you to be gone forever. so please stay.

"I am the bringer of darkness. A shadow in the dark. I prey on the. The child of the lost souls. I hunger for the love of one unknown. The one to reve

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

8 posted 2004-07-30 01:54 PM

Even the darkest of poems entreat a sense of hopless love within their words. I loved it for its purity and it seems to me that love has come and gone in your life. I hope that someday that someone will come in your life and you two may find each other gone for good in each other's hearts.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

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