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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
I wish it was easy to fall apart... I wish I had something to break so I could see what my heart and mind look like on the inside... Everything I said and did didn't seem real...is there any hope? No, no help, no hope, not even a small pasage way out... Would I regret it if I tried to scream or shout?... Would it help at all or just bother my mind and piss myself off? who would care?... Later I wouldn't know if I did it...not that I would have forgotten,it'd just be that I've lost sense of time and realness... Perhaps I'm crazy... I'm sorry for the day I said yes. It didnt seem real...maybe it should come back and hit me hard... so I could pay for lying to you and breaking your heart... But it didn't seem real... Three times too many you have seen me cry... Why should I cry? I'm not hurt as bad But I cried, all because of a guy, one I can't deny... I'd still like to be ur screwed up friend, just as long as I don't hurt you again. I feel like I can do it ..but it's probably not real... I wonder if what I'm feeling now is really how i feel... All I know is when I look you in the eye, it'll hurt to say goodbye, But I'll have paid for hurting you...and I hope this time it'll be real. Afterwards I'll wake up and wonder if it's true Did I lie again? did I really say that to you? What's real anymore? it may be a little hard to follow but if you can relate, it's easier...~brezee~ [This message has been edited by brezee (07-01-2004 06:40 PM).] |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I had to read this poem twice. The first time I read it, it felt more like a rant than a poem. The second time I read it, it seamed more like a poem. Maybe if you spaced the lines out, it would be easier to follow. ~Alli~ |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
thanx for the suggestion. lol honestly it probably was a more like a rant considering how i was feeling, but i'll see if i can't change it a bit to look more interesting....thanx again. ~*brezee*~ |
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