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vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-12-27 12:32 PM


I took down those guarded
walls of safety.
Allowing myself to
love you
trust you
allowing myself
to feel.

You promised you wouldn't
hurt me.
But here i am, looking
up at you,
and the shattered
splintered remains
of my broken heart
are tucked tightly
into your fist.
Droplets of blood,
from where the jagged
edges have cut deep
into your soft skin,
are dripping back
down onto me.

You promised you wouldn't hurt me
And i thought that you'd meant it.
That you'd meant it.


Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it.

© Copyright 2004 Kirsty - All Rights Reserved
silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-12-27 01:06 AM


and the shattered
splintered remains
of my broken heart
are tucked tightly
into your fist.

brillant

it was flowing really well, but then it ended. kinda wished it was longer. remember, IM HERE FOR YOU! and i'm sure he does still love you... tell the full story next time we talk.

Laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2004-12-28 10:31 PM


Pretty cool.  I liked it.  

You'll be alright vampiana, even if he steps out you still have yourself.  

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

aussie teen
Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
Australia
3 posted 2004-12-30 09:17 AM


you know im always here for you to vent too....
do the same back..... revenge is best served cold... atl least that is the best recipe i have ever tried before....

ne ways the poem is beautiful and the imagery in this is electrifing.... well done kurst... keep them coming..
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

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