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junemac
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since 2003-04-24
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0 posted 2004-06-08 05:13 PM



Smell the mildew in the first sickening whiff of air
breathe and hold it within your nostrils for reference
Yes! the fetid familar aroma comes with the dark curtain
and as it slithers back into your consciousness, you retreat.

Scramble now, squeezing within the far corners of your being,
in search of the elusive hiding place, never yet discovered.
Curling, shuddering,repelling are as useless as leaded boots.
No escape from panic that shaves great pieces from your mind.

You are breathless now as the heaviness descends upon you
smothering your will - all beauty and worst of all, hope.
The curtain moulds itself stickily like tar around your heart
and you lick the boots of the madness as it reigns once more.

© Copyright 2004 june macfarlane - All Rights Reserved
River
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since 2003-09-16
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my own little world
1 posted 2004-06-13 12:32 PM


this is...different...interesting? some parts of it where alright, to be honest it's not the best I have read. it definately has a twist to it somehow =)

        - River

Running out of pain

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
Posts 396
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2 posted 2004-06-15 05:12 AM


june..... this is good although a little bit confusing....
to me its like the light before being wrenched back into depression..... i love it yet i am confused by it at the same time....(the emotions that come with depression) because they are familiar to me... i cant really explain..dont really know how...
but ne ways.... i love the poem and hope to read more of your work soon.
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????
i am who i am. no one can change that but me, even then it will be a fight to the death

junemac
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since 2003-04-24
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3 posted 2004-06-15 11:44 AM


Thank you for your replies to both of my poems on here. You are right it is about depression. It is supposed to be about the way depression 'rapes' the mind, I am an unwilling victim of this and that is how I see depression.
Thanks for your understanding and your time in answering this.
Hugs from June x

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