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Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal

0 posted 2004-05-29 12:19 PM


I was experimenting with the depths of depression.  This does not represent my present psyche, okay?



Bitter Winds

Something deep within speaks to me
Not words of comfort or silence
But sharp commands of discontent

They are as the bitter winds
Sweeping as a torrent
Through the deepened valleys
Of my battered psyche
Bending and breaking my thoughts as they pass

And I feel my soul slip and sway
Leaning and contorting
In grotesque fashion
Till all resilience seems to be worn
Small fissures deepening
Fracturing even the very core of me

And I feel as if I shall shatter
Beneath this relentless onslaught
Pieces of me caught upon the winds
As they swirl into madness
Rising in column
To blend with sky

And I am in the storm
This whirlwind of emotion
Until I am swept
Into the eye of Insanity
Where all is quelled
Save the voices in my head
Which whisper now
In the language of despair

S.A.T.


The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

© Copyright 2004 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
Savage Quiescence
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Wandering
1 posted 2004-06-17 03:01 AM


Good flow, emotion, structure and imagery. It only would have been nice to know the source of the written torment. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19
Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket
2 posted 2004-07-04 05:46 PM


So good.....I like it a lot..hit something inside me.
Thanks
<3
Persephone

You better count your lucky stars that everything I wish for..doesnt come true

Theory
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since 2004-05-04
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3 posted 2004-07-09 10:13 AM


"And I feel as if I shall shatter
Beneath this relentless onslaught
Pieces of me caught upon the winds
As they swirl into madness
Rising in column
To blend with sky"

this is great. enjoyed

PKreturns
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since 2003-07-21
Posts 362
New Orleans, LA
4 posted 2004-07-09 04:36 PM


This is good. Good experimenting...you should give in to the dark side more...(darth vader voice)
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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
5 posted 2004-07-10 07:49 PM


Rising in column
To blend with sky

And I am in the storm
This whirlwind of emotion
Until I am swept
Into the eye of Insanity
Where all is quelled
Save the voices in my head
Which whisper now
In the language of despair'''


~

Susan~
you express yourself well! never doubt that I can so relate to this....hugsss

There's a place I like to hide-open your mind to me-Visualise your dream- Record it in the present tense, I am smiling next to you, in silent lucidity

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
6 posted 2004-07-17 08:49 PM


Thank you all for your comments, I appreciate them greatly.  

  susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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