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Third Libra
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0 posted 2004-05-22 12:00 PM



In the eyes of the broken my eyes are kept so broken
So fragile in a blackness be my heart as it beats slowly heartbroken
For it shall never speak, only silent in the shadows, gray and unspoken
Swollen from the blistered wounds and the words of the one I love

Doused in the ugliness bound, forever kept within my soul
I rip and tear my flesh, tormented by the scarred and old
Their chorus, may it be, of my failures and desires of you so bold
The beast, so I am, continuing to tear apart your hope

Still, our lovely secrets be painted upon the walls permanently
By all of this world may it be seen, though it be so blind,
burned into thus obscurity
To remind me of the bittersweet kisses and of the razorblades
so rusty and bloody
Still of the time we danced in the dark for our hollow secret love

Never, not ever; now shall I know,
Cold our existence be so everlasting and everlong
Much for the darkness to mock and murder so wrong
Never shall this hole be filled: you could never save me for long
Never for long at all…
For we died after all…

Love is only an excuse to hurt and to get hurt... Knowledge brings ye fear.

© Copyright 2004 Michael Moore - All Rights Reserved
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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1 posted 2004-05-22 10:38 AM


wow wow wow/,....awesome keep writting

I will cover you with my blood,not only because
i love you but because your are the one that turned my blood a color....

Defective
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since 2003-09-19
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2 posted 2004-05-22 08:51 PM


I tried to go to your xanga but it only had ThirdLibra512, that you?
River
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since 2003-09-16
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my own little world
3 posted 2004-05-24 12:36 PM


hey, good job, as usual, and really sad. keep writing =)

        - River

Running out of pain

Third Libra
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4 posted 2004-05-26 10:56 AM


Thanks for reading and replying, it means a lot!!
oh, and my xanga site is www.xanga.com/third_libra

Love is only an excuse to hurt and to get hurt... Knowledge brings ye fear.

darkness_witch
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Underneath
5 posted 2004-05-28 01:39 AM


wow, amazing. neva read any of urs.... this is wicked stuff.

post some more... id love to read them.

hardcore dude.

darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Isis
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6 posted 2004-06-07 01:27 AM


Really enjoyed this it spoke deeply..
Isis

Third Libra
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7 posted 2004-06-08 11:46 AM


Thanks a lot ya'll.

Love is only an excuse to hurt and to get hurt... Knowledge brings ye fear.

Lexy
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8 posted 2004-06-09 11:14 PM


thus obscurity
Paper Tiger
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9 posted 2004-06-10 12:59 PM


Third Libra, you wouldn't happen to be a fan of A Perfect Circle, would you?

By the way, interesting poem.

We see much, observe little, and perceive less.

Third Libra
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10 posted 2004-06-10 09:59 AM


Thank you both!

oh, and yea. A Perfect Circle is one of my favorite bands.

Love is only an excuse to hurt and to get hurt... Knowledge brings ye fear.

junemac
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11 posted 2004-06-11 03:05 AM


Very dark, very powerful words. I enjoyed.
Still, our lovely secrets be painted upon the walls permanently
By all of this world may it be seen, though it be so blind,
burned into thus obscurity
To remind me of the bittersweet kisses and of the razorblades
so rusty and bloody
Still of the time we danced in the dark for our hollow secret love

WOW !! clever stuff. The other stanza's were great too.

Third Libra
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12 posted 2004-06-12 09:18 PM


Thank you muchly!

Love is only an excuse to hurt and to get hurt... Knowledge brings ye fear.

Paper Tiger
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13 posted 2004-06-13 06:42 PM


I love the mood of this poem!  I really hope to see more from you in the near future.

We see much, observe little, and perceive less.

Third Libra
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since 2003-08-10
Posts 125
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14 posted 2004-06-14 10:51 PM


Thank you muchly! Means a lot!

Love is only an excuse to hurt and to get hurt... Knowledge brings ye fear.

Destinys_Fallen_Angel
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15 posted 2004-06-15 03:24 AM


good poem very interesting and sad...i liked it

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WinterWren
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16 posted 2004-06-16 03:21 PM


Let's see, what can I say that everyone else hasn't already said...nothing. I agree with them, it's very excellent writing here!
I really liked this poem. Especially the line, "you could never save me for long."
Thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

BabieDoll
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BFE
17 posted 2004-07-06 10:09 PM


Absolutely...amazing...

~J.Lynn

There is not ONE person in this world that you cannot live without.

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