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Theory
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since 2004-05-04
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N. CA. USA

0 posted 2004-05-17 03:19 PM


Hi all. this is my first post here. been reading alot from others here. real good stuff. just want to contribute. thanks


Stuck in a world of never endin pain,
bring in the madness.
Feel the rage pulse through every vein,
eternal sadness.
and my mind starts trippin on unimaginable thoughts and my heart starts to slippin, stomach twistin in knots.
Release frustration on white sheets,my pen spills my life blood.
Pour thoughts over self out for someone to judge.
Lookin deep into my being, seeing false thought.
Hatin this fake face, an image created but really not.
I'm still livin lies, not who I'm seeming to be.
dreamin to be liberated from this demon in me.
Screaming and cryin, still denying that he's breathin in me.
bound by one spirit in a prison and we're needing
to flee.
But still fearin to be, seperated from the other.
I'm ugly with no mask, and my hearts dark and smothered and covered up with the ash of a soul that's long burned.
and I've earned all of the pain and remorse I've yet to learn



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Saluting with misty eyes
1 posted 2004-05-17 07:10 PM


This is great...
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kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
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2 posted 2004-05-19 12:05 PM


OH WOW!!!! Very amazing first post! Welcome. I loved it. I absolutely loved it!!!
kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
3 posted 2004-05-19 12:16 PM


WWWWWWWWOWWWWWWWWW....AMAZING. this is even better than mine..lolol....keep it upp love and respect..keep posting ...

peace

I will cover you with my blood,not only because
i love you but because your are the one that turned my blood a color....

River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
4 posted 2004-05-24 12:31 PM


hey, not bad for a first, this reminds me of myself and a friend just to name a few off the top of my head. well done! keep writing, I'm reading

         - River

Running out of pain

green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
5 posted 2004-05-25 02:18 AM


I liked this poem it definitely reminds me of myself with my personal battles with the demons in my head.  As far as writting advise.  Just write what it feels like.
Nice piece

GIS

No turning back, this time, no walking away -Kutless

Theory
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 23
N. CA. USA
6 posted 2004-05-25 02:22 PM


any reply is appreciated. thanks to all for reading.
eor
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since 2002-09-26
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blues & greys
7 posted 2004-05-25 04:49 PM


welcome to pip! hope to see more form you

Beauty is truth, truth beauty

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