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Dark Poetry #4

Dont rescue me

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2004-05-16 01:53 AM

Leave your pity at the door
shut it out for the night
i dont want to see your eyes
for i fear you'll rescue me

I like the feel of your skin
but the pressure you apply hurts
it bruises and scars
but i fear that i like it

Please dont say you'll help me
I dont want fake pretences that your the hero
i dont want you to make me feel better
because, someday i fear i will.

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pe is his/her pants - Brandon B

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-05-16 12:53 PM

I like this... alot!! It was amazing, I could feel everything...wowo. Very awesome!
Kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

2 posted 2004-05-19 02:01 PM

I love the raw, torn emotion behind this but the format needs a little work. With a little attention here and there, I think you might have something wonderful on your hands.

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