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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110
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Twist me up inside you Rearrange me once again Twist me up inside you I’ll fall to pieces in the end Never one to crawl away Cannot stand, much to shattered Never one to crawl away Feeble limbs, bruised and battered La de da, they laugh so gay Giggling smiles, all devil teeth Rage to rip, plundered in play Giggling smiles, all devil teeth In the corner, me madly muttering Twist me up inside you In the corner, see surrendered shuddering Twist me up inside you Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
hmm.. i like it, but the part about twisting you up inside, with the you after it sorta confused me.. I dunno. I liked it though. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Destinys_Fallen_Angel Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 75Boise Idaho |
Very good i enjoyed this poem...great job Yahoo messenger: destinys_Falen_Angel |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
I liked this very much. I'm just curious as to who or what the 3rd stanza is talking about? and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
Society as a whole most likely, as if youve failed at something and they stand back at the edge of the room mocking, laughing at you. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wow...i get knots in my stomache just reading this. good write, you expressed this very well Kuru. - River Running out of pain |
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