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Dark Poetry #4

A meaningful life

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2004-05-02 06:07 PM

I look in the mirror,
Day to day-
I see a boy,
Turning a man someday,

But for now-
My eyes quiver,
As I awake,
To another dreadful day,

I decided today,
Not to shave,
To laziness,
I am the ultimate slave,

I am off to work,
Feeling bit refined,
At least I have a job,
If not the best of the kind,

On my way to work,
I see the man,
Sitting by the streetlight,
While missing life’s, green light.

sweet_cute_palestinian04
Member

since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

1 posted 2004-05-02 06:09 PM

i liked this poem but the only thing i was kinda confused is your rhyming sounds forced espcially in the end...but i like it keep it upp

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