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darkness_witch
Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-12-22 01:11 AM


i
cant
breathe


needing you next to me
i cry

wanting you here with me
i die


when the stars come out
i hide and scream
beneath my covers of my bed
tears drench my pillow
screams fill my ears
while they strain to hear
your voice
cus its fading from my memory


your photo discarded
from my shelf
it inflicts to much pain
on my forever broken heart
i paint scars on my body
with a shard of glass
write your name with my blood
in the hope you'll notice what you do to me

i
struggle
to
stay
above
the
water


i
cant
breathe


*ok yes i know its set out wierdly but thats how i wanted to be... and the title sucks but this is my "festive post" for the season k? thanks if you read this*


nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

© Copyright 2004 Sophie A Ryan - All Rights Reserved
silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
1 posted 2004-12-22 01:24 AM


at least your writing aye
well i enjoyed it nonetheless
i liked the layout actually
and i liked how you expressed the pain and needing through the poem.. i like how you do that

well as i waste away with constipation of the mind, you are off writing beauties like this. brill

laura

you're the only one keeping me alive

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx
2 posted 2004-12-22 01:50 AM


Ouch about the waste away with constipations.  Pray you get better.

darkness- its like a fast ripping of flesh.  And doing it quietly.  I used to write like this.  I think you might remember some of it.  But if the intent was blood and gore, you achieved your goal.  

-GIS

My guitar's name is Jennifer.

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