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silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
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0 posted 2004-04-12 01:32 AM


This is my farewell
before i lose you forever
i want to thank you
for every moment i spent with you
the moments i spent dreaming of you
every moment i wanted you by my side
all those moments helped me pass the time
when you weren't with me

This is all i want to say
before you move on to some other place
i need to let you know
i was always thinking of you
always on the sideline cheering you on
always hoping you'd look my way and notice i gave a damn
your face kept me grounded every time i threatened to fall
when you walked by avoiding my eye contact

This is my last confession
before i lose the will to speak to you again
i think you always knew i loved you
whenever i said hello to you in the mornings
when i told you your eyes were so amazing i could swim in them forever
whenever i shrugged away your smiles or gorgeous laugh
all these times i almost felt like telling you
when i thought you might admit in return

Before it is goodbye
let me say this one last thing
and hope you remember this as the way i am
You were always there in my heart
No matter what you said
And this hole where you left me
Will heal in time
And i'll go on and love another
But you will always hold my respect and love, for being the way you are
And never forget the girl in your block who always looked on in wonder
Never forget i Loved you.

(only few can understand this one. It was written sometime near the end of last year when i felt his way)

The pain of losing you, is still wanting you near.

But your still gone...and I'm still here

© Copyright 2004 L - All Rights Reserved
darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
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1 posted 2004-04-12 04:50 AM


wow
that was amazing.... honestly.

am i right to assume that iots about a certain sum1 with the name starting with 'l'?


dusnt really matter cause it is such a wiked and hardcore poem.

i love it how its a long poem but u neva sorta think... ok this is just a waste of space... very line counted.

wiked.

going to london tnight, hopesfully will be able to get internet.

missin ya.

soph

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

kissa~rachelle
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nowhere special
2 posted 2004-04-12 11:34 PM


I really needed to read this... I can relate. Definetly. I started crying when i read this, and i have been crying all day, so  am surprised that there are any tears left. I am saving this. I loved it. You are an amazing writer, and i love reading all of your poems. Thanx. This helped me more than you will ever know. amazing.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

aujussy wolf
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3 posted 2004-04-13 02:33 AM


silh ... i know what you mean , great poem it flows together great ...too bad its about such a sad topic
later
wolf

River
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since 2003-09-16
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4 posted 2004-04-13 01:37 PM


hey, I totally understand this. probably because I've been there myself. I like how you described it, good imagery...I'm just sorry that you had to go through it too. *hugs*  

   - River


sleep my precious slumber

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
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5 posted 2004-04-14 11:14 PM


Lovie, I think I know who Soph is meaning, that special lovable person beginning with "L", tell us, is it HIM, HIM HIM HIM HIM?

I really can understand, Really. I'm just peachy that everything thing is hunky dory.  

Hollow,

Hollow who knows     

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

[This message has been edited by Hollow_Emptiness (04-15-2004 05:39 PM).]

kissa~rachelle
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nowhere special
6 posted 2004-04-14 11:16 PM


Sorry, i read this again... and it is jsut so amazing... I can relate to it in soo.. many ways.
`kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

silhouetted
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7 posted 2004-04-15 02:28 AM


courtney? how dare you! u no it is not a HER
it is a HIM and yes it does start with a loveable letter "L"

cough cough ogan

neways

Thanx heeps kissa. your work is also brilliant. many of urs i also relate to

LOR

The pain of losing you, is still wanting you near.

But your still gone...and I'm still here

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
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New Zealand
8 posted 2004-04-15 05:37 PM


OMG I'm so sorry, I musn't have put him, I'm sorry don't get me wrong lol. I didn't mean to put her, eeek.....I knew it was _ _ _ _ _, but for some reason I put her, actually now I'm afraid of myself........

Soz Lovie,
Hollow.

Hollow who apologizes and corrects her mistake

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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Earth
9 posted 2004-04-19 07:24 PM


wowwowowowowwowowo...its amazing i was tearing when i was reading it..i felt sooo sooo hard on myself....god .............
but i loved it im keeping this 1 keep it upppp....and i would love to hear from you moree plzz...lolol..

::^love^::

Censored
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since 2004-04-11
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10 posted 2004-04-29 11:04 PM


really enjoyed reading this, honestly
aussie teen
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11 posted 2004-04-30 09:33 AM


this is amazing,
i feel the same in so many ways..... kinda freaky coz im going thru this right now (are you looking in on my life?????) just playin round... keep up the writing girl....... lovin it
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????
i am who i am. no one can change that but me, even then it will be a fight to the death

silhouetted
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Posts 537
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12 posted 2004-04-30 07:51 PM


Thank you all

Yer those times were pretty sad and i always just wanted to run away.

Now i'm going thru a similar stage but for different reasons.

LOR

"It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pe is his/her pants - Brandon B

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