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aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

0 posted 2004-04-11 02:51 AM

sadness taps me on my shoulder
time for my appointment
cloudy sky on my eyebrow
a storm searching for me
seeming like i can never hide
let it be as it will be .. rain on my heart
wash away the pain , wash away her name
i have lost already
fallen to myself
i shrink into nothing .. dust of a fool
a fraction to you
where do i go to erase
the pages i have written
jump from this peak
broken and shallow

.......
JDW III

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

1 posted 2004-04-11 06:31 AM

I hope this is just creative writing...
its beautifully written, even in its sorrow.

If this is "real life" I want you to know that we here enjoy your company and talent very much...and offer

to get you through.

Take care of yourself Wolfy

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

2 posted 2004-04-11 04:58 PM

haha its all creative writing d
thanks for the back up ...
p.s. ...the forum
is for darkness muted , so don't take it personaly
ok

.......
JDW III

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

3 posted 2004-04-12 02:03 AM

just looking after my poet buddy

...
yep, this is dark forum alright, I'll just go looking for a light switch! LOL

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

4 posted 2004-04-12 04:46 PM

hey I like this, very creative and sad, good job =)

- River

sleep my precious slumber

Mt Rowley
Junior Member

since 2004-01-06

Posts 25
United Kingdom

5 posted 2004-04-13 09:57 PM

I followed your name from posts you did for my poems, now its your turn... I really enjoyed reading it but was suprised to find it was creative writing. Maybe its because all that iw write is from "the real world".

another day passes by and all i see are the rings under my eyes. oh why oh why cant i see past my eyes!!!!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2004-04-13 10:24 PM

this is so deep....so well written and full of emotion....

~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

7 posted 2004-04-13 10:41 PM

Great. Amazing in fact, good imagery. Great to hear it's not the truth though. It scared me a little.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

8 posted 2004-04-13 10:48 PM

it is the truth , but its still writing
thanks for the chatter
wolf

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

9 posted 2004-04-14 07:07 PM

Very touching poem. Well expressed.
I love this.
Thanks for sharing, this one's going in my library.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

10 posted 2004-04-15 08:13 PM

winterwren

thanks

.......
JDW III

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

11 posted 2004-04-27 12:18 PM

Oops sorry that came out wrong *blush*, I meant to say that I'm glad it's creative writing, you get what I mean? Lol.

Hollow.

"Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

12 posted 2004-04-28 06:59 AM

hey wolf... this is amazing. the imagery is incredible and your use of words... well ill try not to get too carried away....
im sure most people have felt like this before and well not been able to write something quite like this... i know i have tried but it never flows naturally

keep it up
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

13 posted 2004-04-29 06:41 PM

thanks for the feedback peeps
,wolfy

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

14 posted 2004-10-12 01:19 PM

" dust of a fool
a fraction to you
where do i go to erase
the pages i have written"

wolf-man...feeling this...writhes on the page...

**babygirL**

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

15 posted 2004-10-13 11:46 AM

I'm with you there, James
seems no matter how much I jump
back up and dust myself off

the memories remain . . .

(thats a good and bad thing)
*smile*

Beautiful writing, as always

Angel101¢¾!
Junior Member

since 2007-10-21

Posts 48
Lost in pain

16 posted 2007-10-22 11:00 PM

I love this poem!!!!!!! Check some a mi poems out

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

17 posted 2007-10-25 10:49 AM

Your poem is amazing made me cry also I wonder who is this person your writing about???

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