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ChemicalRepose
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since 2004-03-28
Posts 102


0 posted 2004-03-30 12:04 PM


A gesture of hope

reliquished by a memory

down another rabit hole

is my tendancy

Digging in this flesh on mine

to feel the symphony

to indulged me

in this hopeless sympathy
to fall down in a hole

to feel bored

and to be alone

to engage upon

and let lose

with my forbidden soul
Digging through this

to feel my apathy

this perssitance

grabs a hold of me

Grappled like a fish

surrendering to our pity

My deviated serenity
Reliquish all this again

take it in and allow it

to fill this hole

grasp it

and forgive me now
Only tedium in this hole

Just fly away in this fatigue of mine

© Copyright 2004 Ben - All Rights Reserved
Paragon
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since 2003-02-16
Posts 114

1 posted 2004-03-30 12:14 PM


very interesting rhythm to this peice I enjoyed reading it, well done.

Paragon.

eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
2 posted 2004-04-03 06:49 AM


intrestinf write, but the second to last line didnt make sense to me...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

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