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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2004-03-26 06:31 PM


Plastic dreaming, all smooth and safe.
Daytime slumbering, while the blue birds calm my rampant heart.

Overwhelm! quick cleaning.
Wipe up the mess, before it can overflow.
The words settle in my stomach, instead of yours.
So much safer here.

Safe cotton dreaming
with that dryer fresh scent, all clean and white.
I'm learning to prevent stains.
Got my windex ready,...but my windows are becomming so bright that I can see my reflection.  

Worlds clash.
I'm inside, behind, slow to receive and react.
I'm retreating to my world of fisher price and legos.
My plastic amateur playground.
That way its easier to clean up all the blood and tears.
All the things I hold in during the day.
I retreat to my artificial dream place.
Where I can vomit, cry and bleed out all my rotting insides.

© Copyright 2004 Alexis Smith - All Rights Reserved
River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
1 posted 2004-03-27 02:09 PM


this is...wow.

sleep my precious slumber

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
2 posted 2004-03-27 05:41 PM


wow....

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Mt Rowley
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since 2004-01-06
Posts 25
United Kingdom
3 posted 2004-03-28 02:33 PM


very strong, blunt ending. good.
loner187
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since 2004-03-21
Posts 106
Upstate New York
4 posted 2004-03-29 08:45 PM


incredible. i'm left with my mouth hanging wide open...
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
5 posted 2004-03-30 04:13 AM


very strong write
eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
6 posted 2004-04-03 06:46 AM


^
ditto that...very strong write indeed, nice use of language as well

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan
7 posted 2004-04-30 09:28 PM


Inspirational...
ZM Synerus
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since 2004-05-06
Posts 2
Vermont
8 posted 2004-05-06 06:24 PM


This is definitely powerful; there's no mistaking the emotion behind it.  Well done.  

*~Z~*

"Silence is the loudest parting word you never say." - Ben Harper

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